Talk:Gondolin/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 15:57, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
I will review this. TompaDompa (talk) 15:57, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
General comments
[edit]- There are quite a few images. I would consider removing the Loback illustration for layout reasons.
- Done.
Lead
[edit]the betrayal of the city to Morgoth
– I would gloss "Morgoth".- Done.
the wedding of Tuor and Idril
– Tuor has been glossed earlier in the paragraph as "a prince of Men". I would gloss Idril here, at first mention.- Done.
City
[edit]- I have re-added the map.
- Thanks.
- I would gloss the key players at first mention after the lead. Turgon is glossed as King, Idril as Turgon's daughter, and Maeglin as Turgon's nephew, but neither Morgoth nor Tuor is glossed.
- Added.
Foundation
– I would use "founding".- Done.
- The reference following "The city of Gondolin" seems like it should be an explanatory footnote instead, no?
- Formatted.
designed like the Noldor's former city
– I would write "[...] the Noldor Elves' former city" to make it clearer to readers unfamiliar with Tolkien's works.- Done.
Analysis
[edit]- I have some comments I could make on the "Classical literature" subsection, but since I previously reviewed the corresponding Tolkien and the classical world#Gondolin-Troy subsection, the simplest solution for both of us would be to copy that subsection wholesale to resolve all of the issues at once. I think the only thing that would need to be altered from that version might perhaps be some duplicate links.
- Done.
the emblems of the houses of Gondolin are simply figurative
– I initially parsed "simply figurative" as "purely figurative", but from reading the source ("both figurative [...] and straightforward") I gather the intended meaning is "simple and figurative"?- Done.
depicting everyday objects
– I don't know that the source really says that, and I wouldn't personally describe e.g. gemstones as such.- Reworded.
Summary
[edit]GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- See above.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- All sources are, as far as I can tell, reliable for the material they are cited for.
- C. It contains no original research:
- See above.
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- Earwig reveals no copyvio, and I didn't spot any instances of unacceptably WP:Close paraphrasing outside of the "Classical literature" subsection.
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- No obvious neutrality issues.
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Ping Chiswick Chap. TompaDompa (talk) 00:43, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
Great job! TompaDompa (talk) 20:06, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.