Talk:Go Vacation/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Namcokid47 (talk · contribs) 19:13, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

I'll start a new one here as to avoid clutter on the previous one.

1. I feel like the Gameplay section is.....too long? Try shortening a few sentences/paragraphs or combine them, such as the areas talking about the resorts. I feel like it drags on about the resorts too much, which should be fixed. I can help you with this if you want.

1.  Comment: I have fixed the area about the resorts- I don't think we needed to list all of the vehicles in every resort. I also merged those paragraphs together, am working on fixing more in that section. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:56, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. Remove the big space between the Gameplay and Development sections.

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 23:53, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

1. "...including Ridge Racer, Dig Dug, Pac-Man, New Rally-X, and Kobota no Puzzle: Mojipittan." <-All these games should be italicized. Also change "Kobota" to "Kotoba".

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 23:53, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

1. "...such as "Endless Ocean, Pac 'n Roll, Leedmees and Wipeout HD" <- Same as above.

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:05, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. All review publication titles need to be italicized as well, such as Nintendo World Report, IGN, etc.

1.  Comment: I think I got them all, I ran into a bit of trouble italicizing Jeuxvideo, since that uses the "lang" tag to indicate it's in french, and when using that tag you can only make the entire thing italic, not just parts of it. I didn't want to make the "'s" italic, so I had to make that separate, and link that to the page on Jeuxvideo. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:05, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. Animal Crossing needs to be italicized in the Review section as well. On the topic of the Review area, stick the line about vehicles into the second paragraph.

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:05, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. "Go Vacation's music was criticized by some" <- I'd change Go Vacation into "The game".

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:09, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. Merge the last two paragraphs in the Reception section to another part of the article.

1.  Comment: Do you mean the last two sentences in the sales part of the reception section? TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 02:06, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

I've already fixed this. Namcokid47 (talk) 13:58, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1.  Comment: Thanks! TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 20:42, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

1. Remove the link to Macross F: The Wings of Goodbye Hybrid Pack in the Sales subsection.

1.  Comment: Done. TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:09, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

Overall, it's looking a lot better than before. I'd say once these are fixed, and everything looks okay afterwards, I'll promote it to Good Article status. Namcokid47 (talk) 19:13, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

@Namcokid47: I think everything's been done now, is there any other concerns you have? TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 20:42, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

I had a few other concerns, but I decided to just fix these myself as they're quite minor. I don't see anything else wrong with the page (although I guess the music samples could be moved to the Development section), so I'll go ahead and promote it. Namcokid47 (talk) 00:13, 22 June 2019 (UTC)

Yay! Thanks for spending the time to review the article not once, but twice! TheAwesomeHwyh (talk) 00:24, 22 June 2019 (UTC)