Talk:Gilbert de Clare, 8th Earl of Gloucester/GA1

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum 13:24, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This appears to be generally excellent, just a few things to consider:

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Who was in charge of Gilbert's inheritance between his father's death and him reaching the age of 16? His mother? I'm slightly confused by this sentence in the Family background and early life section: "As a condition for the marriage, the earl had to surrender all his lands to the king, only to have them returned for the lifetime of himself and his wife." It's that "for the lifetime of himself and his wife" that's bothering me, as it seems to imply that it was for the lifetime of both of them, i.e., the couple, rather than either one of them, if you see what I mean.
- The King - or whoever he granted the wardship of this minor to. Under the circumstances, his mother is likely, but not certain; this can be checked. Septentrionalis PMAnderson 13:37, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The re-grant was made jointly to the two, for the lifetime of either, so Joan remained in possession. Hope this is clearer now. Lampman (talk) 23:49, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Early service under Edward II

"He did, however, share in the other earl's frustration with Edward's lack of initiative towards Scotland.". This reads slightly strangely in the context of the following sentence: "In 1308, therefore, Gloucester was among the earls who demanded Gaveston's exile, a demand the king was forced to meet." It seems like "the other earl's" frustration is referring to Gaveston's (then Earl of Cornwall)'s frustration, but that doesn't seem to sit with the second sentence. Should the first one be "other earls' frustration"?

Yep, just a silly typo. Fixed. Lampman (talk) 23:49, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Relations deteriorated even further, however, after Gaveston's return." Relations between whom? The king and Gilbert? The earls and Gaveston?

The king and the earls. Added. Lampman (talk) 23:49, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Gloucester, who was still a supporter of the king, was not initially among the Ordainer ...". Should that be "Ordainers"?

Another typo. Fixed. Lampman (talk) 23:49, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

And that's just about it. Malleus Fatuorum 13:24, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review, and the thorough copy-edit. There's one thing I don't quite agree with though, and that is the capitalisation of the word "earl". WP:Job titles says that such titles should "start with a capital letter only when followed by a person's name", so "Earl Gilbert of Gloucester", but "the earl of Gloucester" (by this logic, page titles should be in the form "Gilbert de Clare, 8th earl of Gloucester", but this doesn't seem to be Wikipedia practice.) Lampman (talk) 23:49, 1 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, it seems clear to me the "Earl of Gloucester" is a proper noun, but I won't fight you over it. I think that my view is supported by this in the MoS: "it is correct to write "Louis XVI was King of France". Anyway, thanks for dealing with the other minor issues I raised. Malleus Fatuorum 00:37, 2 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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