Talk:Giant Schnauzer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 13:01, 27 July 2013 (UTC)

• Hi, I will review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 13:01, 27 July 2013 (UTC)
• It seems to have any common names, why is Riesenschnauzer specifically listed instead of any of the others?

•  Done I listed it because it was mentioned on the AKC page; I went back and read it and it simply says that it's the german name for the dog so I've removed it.

• • • Still there as far as I can see, but you could perhaps add the next most used English common name (whatever that is) instead? FunkMonk (talk) 15:05, 27 July 2013 (UTC)

• Oops, I may have accidently saved over it and re-added it. I was accidently editing in two different tabs at one point. I'm not sure there is another common English name; I keep track of them as I research (to use as search terms) and that's all I could find. --TKK! bark with me if you're my dog! 15:12, 27 July 2013 (UTC)

• The last sentence in the lead seems to be hanging, could it be merged with the paragraph above?

•  Done Changed. I moved it to the end of the first paragraph.

• The lead makes it seem certain what breeds were used as basis for this one, but the article states it is speculation.

•  Done Changed

• The following from the lead is more detailed thna the description of the same is in the article body: "Solid black, and a color known as salt and pepper, where white, black, and gray hairs speckle the dog at random, making it look like it has been seasoned." There should be no unique info in the lead not also in the article.

•  Done Flip-flopped them, since that information is in the ref

• The following from the lead is not mentioned specifically in the article either: "It is the largest of the three breeds of Schnauzer, with the other two breeds being the Standard Schnauzer and the Miniature Schnauzer."

•  Done Added to the article body

• yOPU WRITE "SHOULD BE" ABOUT ALL THE PHYSICAL FEATURES, INSTEAD OF FOR EXAMPLE "THEY ARE". wOULD THE LATTER NOT BE BETTER? Whoops, wrote the former with caps lock on, but since this is not article space, I'll just leave it as is...

•  Done Corrected

• "Some breeders believe that salt and pepper colored Giant Schnauzers are more docile than their black-furred counterparts.[5]" Does that not make more sense under temperament?

•  Done Moved to the temperament section

• "Giant Schnauzers are usually a quiet breed.[3]" Is this in reference to barking? Because if it is about behaviour, it does not seem to be consistent with the preceding text.

•  Done Corrected by rearranging the paragraphs a bit

• The images in the infobox and under appearance could need some description templates on Commons, they are very lacking as of now.

•  Done I've added the templates.

• "The Giant Schnauzer should be "amiable in repose, and a commanding figure when aroused"[6]" There should not be important text in the captions that is not also in the article.

•  Done Fixed

• "Cancer is common in dark-colored dogs" Why?

•  Done Added an explanation.

• I think it looks pretty good now, so I've passed it. You don't really need the white space under temperament, but that's up to you. FunkMonk (talk) 15:43, 27 July 2013 (UTC)