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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 20:22, 15 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • I would combine the second and third sentences of the lead’s first paragraph to the following as the sentences read a little choppy in their current wording: Written and produced by Pharrell Williams, it is a pop-funk song that lyrically discusses sexual desire.
  • The phrase “the lead single from the album” should be revised to “the album’s lead single” to consolidate the wording.
  • Please revise/expand the final sentence of the lead to include information about the other live performances of the song.
  • Clarify the meaning “that May” by adding the year or simply removing the reference to the date as it is not entirely necessary.
  • Please complete the “Media date and Non-free use rationale” table for the audio sample.
  • While this does not need to be addressed at the GA level, I would just caution you to be careful about over-relying on quotes and to paraphrase more if you want to work on this more in the future.
  • Clarify the meaning of “(of all sizes)”.
  • The phrasing “decked out with” seems too informal. I would revise it with stronger language.
Final comments.
@Aoba47: Fixed.--Shane Cyrus (talk) 13:39, 16 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]