Talk:George Tucker (politician)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:17, 27 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Will review this. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 15:17, 27 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Update: A bit busy now, I think I will be able to get to this only by the end of this week. Cheers! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 18:46, 27 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am quite appreciative of your offer to review this, and I will do my best to collaborate as needed. Hoppyh (talk) 20:22, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Hoppyh: Thanks! I have added all my comments: Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 09:15, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you—I will do my best to respond. Hoppyh (talk) 15:09, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

I believe the 2nd para of the lead should start with details of his birth.
had children with wife Maria Carter Would be good to add the number of children as well.
His third wife, of 30 years, was Louisa Thompson When did she die?
the age of eighty-six Unless we have a special reason, such as presentation, to keep numbers equal to or above 10 in words, we generally express them in digits as per the MoS. You should check this throughout the article.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 15:42, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Family and early life in Bermuda

Tucker was born in Bermuda on St. George's Island, the second son of Daniel and Elizabeth Tucker I am sure the island was not their son.
Add the date of birth.
Reading included Tom Jones, The Vicar of Wakefield, and Arabian Nights This is something interesting. I have never seen such a "books read" part in other articles. What is the speciality of including this part? He could have read a lot of other renown books.

They were examples in American education - added.Hoppyh (talk) 16:36, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

at Yale.) Should this not be "at Yale)."?
You need to add a few details on who Bascomb was.

Added the little known about him. Hoppyh (talk) 16:36, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 16:34, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Immigration to America, education and marriage

Should we not say "first marriage" in the heading?
find the academic work undermanding I think it should be "undemanding".
through the connection with his cousin "through his cousin" would do.
he anxiously returned to Williamsburg and began a courtship with Mary Byrd Farley, possessed of much charm and fortune, and to whom he proposed Seems a bit too fast. As if he rushed with the aim of proposing to Mary.
"bar exam" may be linked

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 18:37, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Richmond society, second marriage, slavery and politics

The letter is said to By whom?
age seventeen and pregnant "aged"?

Fowler's= "age". Hoppyh (talk) 18:53, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

proposing a remedy to slavery, entitled Letter to a Member of the General Assembly of Virginia on the Subject of the Late Conspiracy of the Slaves with a Proposal for Their Colonization (1801) I think the name should come first, then the proposal.
The last two paras under Positions on slavery do not seem to belong there.
Tucker, an incompetent marksman "incompetent" sounds a bit too strong, and a bit originally researched.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 18:53, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Scandal, rustic life and valor

At home, Maria gave birth I think we should begin with "Meanwhile", not "At home".
addition of daughter Maria Have we mentioned her birth earlier?
Frederick County, Va. Expand Va.
For his part, Tucker was disappointed with an absence of the desired social life. While he thought all his neighbors "friendly and civil", they were also "unpolished and plain". Apparently sourced.
In Tucker's autobiography he relates that Better say "In his autobiography, Tucker relates, "..."

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:04, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Elective office and early writing

a child, Harriett, from Whooping Cough You did not mention a daughter by this name, did you? And it should be "whooping cough".

see "Rural settings" Hoppyh (talk) 19:20, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

and ultimate 1838 death in Philadelphia "and ultimately his death in 1838 in Philadelphia"

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:20, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Later politics and major literary works

"Secret ballot" and "universal suffrage" may be linked
the first fictional tale of life in Virginia. I think it was a sci-fi, as you said in the lead.

The sci-fi is "Voyage to the Moon". Hoppyh (talk) 19:27, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have been inattentive, sorry. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 09:46, 6 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

pseudonym Joseph Atterley I don't think the name needs to be in italics
Has Thomas Jefferson been wikilinked anywhere in the main text?

At first reference in the lede.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:27, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Final years

If Tucker had displayed in his old age "a spirit of pugnacity becoming earlier years" as one detractor claimed, such a nature was not in evidence with his family A minor observation, this line appears a bit too positive about Tucker, and referring to someone as a detractor may appear like siding with Tucker. I might be wrong, but felt I should share this.
He appears to have been consistent in his devotion, which was returned in kind. Could not understand this

The intent is merely to convey mutual closeness with family. Hoppyh (talk) 19:39, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

He was buried at the University of Virginia Cemetery. Source?

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:39, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That should be all. These addressed, I would be happy to promote such a wonderful article. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 09:15, 1 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think I have addressed all the above—let me know if anything else strikes you. Thanks again for your time and effort on this. Hoppyh (talk) 19:39, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Hoppyh. I believe the article meets all the GA criteria now. Happy to promote this. Great job! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 09:47, 6 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]