Talk:George Kistiakowsky/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get started on this shortly. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	All points addressed - Promoted

Comments

the article links to several dab pages [1]
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
alt text needed on some images (not a GA requirement) per [2]
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
all other toolbox checks are green. (no action required)
development of shaped charges
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Hugh Stott Taylor , needs to lose the space before the comma
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
and ~~game~~gave him
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
He became an associate professor twice, might be worth clarifying the second time was at Harvard
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
tapped - suggest a little informal, perhaps "selected" or "recruited"
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Spring → spring
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
was ~~into~~ RDX
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The challenge was to produce an industrial process that could produce it on a large scale", suggest substituting the first "produce" with "develop"
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
~~and~~which was widely used in torpedoes
- Y Ooops. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
~~calling out~~that demanded ~~for~~further investigation
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
suggest you explain a little more about the Chapman–Jouguet model, perhaps "the Chapman–Jouguet model of detonation velocity"?
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The first para of the Manhatten Project subsection starts in 1944 then goes back to 1943. Suggest you put it in chronological order to show how he became involved
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Kistiakowsky watched the as the" not sure if a word is missing or extra
- Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
He sent Kistiakowsky, in early November 1960, to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans → In early November 1960, he sent Kistiakowsky to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The orders gave SAC officers the choice to cooperate with Kistiakowsky, do you mean they had no choice? Unclear.
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
fn's 13 & 23, pp→p
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
his name is unnecessarily bolded in the Refs (Dainton)
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
physics should probably have an initial capital in the infobox
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The file File:George Kistiakowsky ID badge.png just needs its PD licence tweaked over at Commons to fix a syntax error
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
there are three overlinks, Physical chemistry, Manhattan Project and American Chemical Society
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That's it, placing on hold for seven days for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:00, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Good work, moving to promote. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 01:48, 25 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]