Talk:George Charles Moʻoheau Beckley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:13, 27 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs, external link OK
Suggest life's work rather than life's career
Link steamships, whaling, captain, drydocked, deckhand, first officer, first mate, master, pilot, San Francisco, California, masonic temple
If the orders listed in the lede are notable, red link them
Is there a link to the Hawaiian royal family?
with half-brother Hoapili "her"
Explain or link the ranks of the Hawaiian nobility of this time
The couple were known for being gracious host and hostess during the years of the monarchy. Fluff
Give more background on William Hauluheimalama and his mother's relationship with Beckley
Pirate Shenandoah? Do you mean the Confederate raider CSS Shenandoah?
from ~~all~~ captured the
"Boat steerer" howzabout "helmsman" with a link?
and was at some point drydocked All ships get drydocked multiple times over their lives. Why is this important here?
Too many dates in close proximity in the third para of the career section. Switch things up by using expressions like, "the following year", "two years later", etc.
What are 'unihipili bones?
You are incosistent in how you capitalize titles and subtitles in your refs section. Put them in title case to match the titles in your bibliography.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:17, 3 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Failed as non-responsive.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:43, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]