Talk:George Charles Beckley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 00:48, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 00:48, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

• He sold his ship to local chiefs and took up residence in the kingdom was this one chief or multiple?

• Not specified but it is plural chiefs. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:32, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

• Beckley was made a high chief by Kamehameha I so that he might, with "impunity enter the sacred precincts of the grass house and present the royal infant with a roll of China silk, after which he went outside and fired a salute of thirteen guns in her honor." this seems to imply that he had to be a high chief to enter the grass house; else it might mean he needed to be high chief to fire the gun, may want to specify that only high chiefs or above were allowed to enter/fire the guns.

• Changed it to make more sense. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:32, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

• Beckley implemented the tradition of wearing Western uniforms, gaining the name "Humehume" (cover up) by the Hawaiians. Previously the native soldiers only wore the traditional malo (loincloths) suggest:

  Beckley implemented the tradition of wearing Western uniforms, gaining the name "Humehume" (cover up) by the Hawaiians, who had previously worn only the traditional malo (loincloths).

  This might be good as is. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:33, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

• @KAVEBEAR: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 10:46, 23 July 2018 (UTC)