Talk:Geoffrey Cuming/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Pbritti (talk · contribs) 21:10, 6 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Dclemens1971 (talk · contribs) 14:22, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

I am beginning a co-review with Rollinginhisgrave. Dclemens1971 (talk) 14:22, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

GA review

Last updated: 19:48, 8 October 2024 (UTC) by Pbritti

See what the criteria are and what they are not

1) Well-written

1a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct

1b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation

2) Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check

2a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline

2b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose)

2c) it contains no original research

2d) it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism

• No evidence of copyright violations or close paraphrasing. The only matches are direct quotations or book titles.

3) Broad in its coverage

3a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic

3b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style)

4) Neutral:

4) Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each

5) Stable:

5) Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute

6) Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio

6a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content

6b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions

Overall:

Comments:

Content and sources (only part of the way through)

• Per MOS:CONTEXTBIO, a nationality descriptor in the lead sentence is expected, and while Church of England implies English, the implication is not necessary.
  •  Done.
• which produced the Alternative Service series, Alternative Service Book, and Common Worship. Why not link the "Alternative Service" series, and what is the relation between the Alternative Service series and the ASB? Unclear.
  • There is no article (yet!) for the Alternative Service series. It was a number of pamphlet/booklet publications released in the 1960s and 1970s across three series and, unfortunately, gets absurdly complicated rather quickly. I recently bought three books with the aim of making an article just about the series, so stay tuned for that. I may try to add a sentence here that more thoroughly addresses the series' role and importance.
• Source 1 is a primary source only accessibly via Ancestry.com; a secondary source is preferred. Does the Ancestry.com source validate just the birth date or also the location? If only the former, bring forward the CDSP obituary note, which does mention the birthplace.
• Schoolmate Henry Chadwick described Cuming as "quiet and bookish". It is unclear which source verifies this. A spot-check of the source at the end of the next sentence does not reveal this quotation.
  • This is sourced in the citation provided. The full quote from page vii of Chadwick's forward in The Identity of Anglican Worship is {{tq|I first knew him as a musician, and recall him in 1934 introducing me, three years his schoolboy junior, to Stravinsky's Rite of Spring, an enthusiasm that made a splendid contrast to his otherwise quiet and bookish ways."
• Late in life, Geoffrey Cuming was known for his humour and grey beard but his disabilities caused by wartime injury left him growingly limited in what he could do. He died at age 70[5] during the night of 24 March 1988 in Houston, Texas. A month prior, Cuming had a successful arterial bypass surgery; he had been discussing returning to England with his daughter during the hours preceding his death. Memorial services in both Houston and Oxford were planned, with his ashes to be interned at the latter. Generally, material should be presented in chronological order per MOS:CHRONOLOGICAL. Not seeing a good reason to do otherwise here.
• Prior to and during the Second World War, Cuming maintained a record of newly released musical records. Repetition of "record" unclear here; suggest rephrasing.
• Their text was called "huge" by music historian Harold C. Schonberg. Place the Schonberg citation after this sentence.

Format

• An infobox is not required but is helpful.
  • I considered one, but the articles on his notable works are pending and are the only major elements that I would add to an infobox. If I end up completing those articles, I'll put together an infobox.
• Suggested image to add: Alternative Service Book cover