Talk:Genghis Khan (Miike Snow song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 23:49, 24 March 2018 (UTC)
- Grabbing for a review if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 23:49, 24 March 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- Please include ALT text for the infobox.
- I would move the sentence about the song’s release as the second single to the second sentence of the first paragraph. For a majority of the song articles that I have seen, the sentence on the single release is placed as the second sentence of the first paragraph as it is rather important information.
- For this sentence (Written and produced by the band alongside Henrik Jonback, the song was conceived when lead singer Andrew Wyatt felt like a tyrant while in a long-distance relationship, comparing this tyranny to that of Mongolian Emperor Genghis Khan.), I would avoid the repetition of “tyrant” and “tyranny” in such close proximity.
- I do not think that “emperor” needs to be capitalized in the phrase “Mongolian emperor”.
- I am not sure if this part (preceding the release of the album) is necessary.
- Background and release
- Please include ALT text for the image.
- I do not think that “emperor” needs to be capitalized in the phrase “Mongolian emperor”.
- For this part (The hook came about when Wyatt thought of himself and how), do you think that “hook” should be linked to hook (music)?
- Please shorten “Atlantic Records” to “Atlantic” and “Jackalope Recordings” to “Jackalope”.
- Composition and lyrics
- For this part (Instrumentation is provided by drums, piano, and synthesizer.), I would say “a piano” and “a synthesizer”.
- I do not think that “emperor” needs to be capitalized in the phrase “Mongolian emperor”.
- Critical reception
- For this part (named it an Essential Track and wrote), does “essential track” need to be capitalized?
- Is there any structure or reason for separating the information into three paragraphs? I would try to give this section more of a structure to avoid having it look like a random listing of critics and related quotes.
- Chart performance
- I could not find any issue with this section.
- Music video
- No issues. The video sounds really cool though and right up my alley.
- Live performances and cover version
- Please include ALT text for the image.
- Unlink Paste as it was already linked in a previous section.
- References
- This is not required for the GA review, but I would encourage you to archive the sources to prevent link rot and death.
- Final comments
- Great work with this article as usual. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this as a GA. Aoba47 (talk) 17:47, 25 March 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I believe the issues have been addressed (can't believe I never seem to be able to remember the ALT texts). Pancake (talk) 19:54, 25 March 2018 (UTC)
- I am glad that I can help, and it is a rather easy thing to forget. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 21:26, 25 March 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I believe the issues have been addressed (can't believe I never seem to be able to remember the ALT texts). Pancake (talk) 19:54, 25 March 2018 (UTC)
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