Talk:Gene Bearden/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:42, 28 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Consider linking minor leagues to Minor League Baseball
"He lived in Helena, Arkansas after retiring" - Need a geographic comma after Arkansas
Link rookie
Last MLB appearance needs cited
Final MLB statistics need cited

Early life and military service

Link Missouri Pacific Railroad.
"Bearden returned to baseball that same year as a part of the New York Yankees organization" - Most recent discussed year is 1949, not 1945, so probably best to give 1945 there.

Cleveland Indians

"After the game, he was demoted to the Triple-A Baltimore Orioles of the International League, he quit the team after two defeats, not wanting to pitch in International League ballparks as he found them too small" - This reads very clunky with the comma after League. A semicolon or a full stop would be better.
"On October 8, in game 1948 World Series" - Missing the game number, and if a specific number (Game 1, etc.) game should be capitalized.
"he also had two hits at bat, including a double" - This doesn't make sense
"of the National League's Boston Braves" - Move National League's up to where the Boston Braves are first mentioned, and then you can just say the Braves.
Complete game is overlinked

Later life and career

"after a 6.15 ERA in 14 appearances, the Indians placed him on waivers" - When? Surely the transaction dates are known
"In 34 games played" - I've always seen games pitched, rather than games played, for pitcher appearances.

References

The Neyer/James Guide version that's linked to, the relevant page number for the information it's citing (ref 5) is page 129 not 142
For the Baseball-Reference citations, you have Sports Reference LLC and Sports Reference, LLC (the comma), this should be consistent.

That's it for the first pass, placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 02:02, 28 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Issues fixed, thanks for the review. Only thing I couldn't find was the day he was placed on waivers. I did add an exact date for when he was picked up by Washington, and I imagine the release would've been a couple of days before that (he last pitched July 27 so that's a small window). Wizardman 00:32, 30 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Wizardman: - I'm not seeing where his final career stats are cited. They're in the infobox and the lead, but aren't cited anywhere. Hog Farm _Bacon 00:37, 30 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thought I did that; added now. Wizardman 00:50, 30 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]