Talk:Tweek (gamer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 17:54, 3 August 2020 (UTC)

{{in progress}} Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 17:54, 3 August 2020 (UTC)

Comments below:

• Overall
  • Is there nothing out there about his early life and how he got into professional competition? You have his hometown in the infobox and his birthdate in the lead, but no apparent reference for this information.
  • Lead doesn't adequately summarize article (it feels like a random assortment of his top finishes instead of following a structure that explains the topic.)

• Prose:
  • You shouldn't use contractions for encyclopedic writing (the character he'd use two years later in his first tournament win)
  • What are the Panda Global Rankings? These are repeatedly referred to but never with an indication of why that's notable. Same with Low Tier City 5/7, etc. It really needs to be more accessible to more casual readers.

• References:
  • You've got a lot of opening sentences in paragraphs that aren't referenced, and go beyond what I'd consider uncontroversial statements that don't need to be, especially since they editorialize on his performance, e.g. Although Tweek competed in a small number of Super Smash Bros. Melee events, he first rose to prominence competing in Super Smash Bros. for Wii U., Tweek's next tournament wins came in May, where he won both Saints Gaming Live and Get On My Level 2019. , Genesis 6, which was held at the end of January, was Tweek's first major event after being signed by TSM., Throughout the second half of 2019, Tweek put on strong performances at several major tournaments, but won few of them., Due to the pandemic, most of the tournaments scheduled for the first half of 2020 were cancelled or moved online.—citations needed. This is a huge issue throughout the article.
  • What makes Shoryuken, The Game Haus, EvenHubs, GameTyrant, Hotspawn, and Dexerto reliable sources? I not specifically that Shoryuken, Dexerto, and EventHubs are listed as unreliable per discussions at WP:VG/S.
  • Spot-checked statements attributed to current refs 1, 2, 7, 12, 14, 15, 21, 29, 34, and 42.
    • Ref 14 is used to source As a result of his strong performances, Tweek was ranked the second best Smash player for 2018 in the Panda Global Rankings, behind only Leonardo "MKLeo" López Pérez. By this time, Panda Globlal listed his main character as Bayonetta, with Cloud Strife and Donkey Kong as secondaries. but the video at the time quoted says nothing about his secondary characters.

The fact that a number of references appear to be unreliable and there's a ton of synthesis here, as well as a lack of basic information I'd expect to meet the minimum threshold of comprehensiveness, mean I'm failing the article at present. Once the above issues have been addressed I encourage you to resubmit the article. Thanks, Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 20:58, 8 August 2020 (UTC)