Talk:Gastroenteritis/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 15:18, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: On hold for an indefinite time.
Pass/Fail:

Sorry for the long delay; my monitor has an odd graphical error which I can not fix. I am currently editing on a very low resolution.
According to my medical dictionary, the pathogen is sometimes, but rather rarely, staphylococci. Not sure if it is important to mention, though.

Okay found a review and added a comment on it.Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 23:45, 25 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe add what type of food causes the transmission of these bacteria (eg. butter, meat, eggs, etc).

Good idea. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 01:09, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No mention of the incubation time (4-48 hours according to my dictionary)?

Under signs and symptoms "Signs and symptoms usually begin 12–72 hours after contracting the infectious agent." --Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 01:10, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

According to my book, a pronounced exsiccosis might appear through water and mineral loss, which in combination with a toxemia might cause a collapse (Cholera nostras). Is this worth the mention?

Should be within the cholera article. But I agree we need more details on cholera here.--Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 01:14, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Overall great article.--GoP _T ^C _N 15:44, 25 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Why not use more pictures (not a requirement, but the article looks better if there are more pictures than only one)? Here are some:

Added one.Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 01:14, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The article is at the moment too human-centric; how about some information about the illness in animals, such as dogs and hamsters (see German article; although uncited, I am pretty sure you can find some useful content)?

Have added some. --Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 02:03, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

(The history section is rather small. Are there really no more information about the "discovery" of Gastroenteritis? Do ancient Egyptians, Greeks, etc knew about this disease? If yes, how did they treated it? And I am not sure if the mention of an US president is really necessary and appropiate. I think there should be some sort of a "notable people with gastroenteritis" section) <-- This might be useful if you want to raise the article to FA-status. I searched for more informatino about this, but I could not find any. It is fine at the moment. If possible create a see-also and an external links section.

See also sections are not recommended per WP:MEDMOS. I have requested that DMOZ add gastroenteritis but this might take some time. We do have external links in the infobox. With respect to the history of the disease the term was only coined in 1825 per the OED. I am having trouble finding good sources. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 01:28, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

--GoP _T ^C _N 22:00, 25 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I think it now meets the criteria. I will pass it; nicely done! :)--GoP _T ^C _N 11:06, 26 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]