Talk:Garret Hobart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 20:27, 1 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

As much as I hate "tagging" articles the same day as they're nommed, I actually know a great deal about Hobart, so I could give this a good review. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:27, 1 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"Childhood tales of the future vice president describe him as an excellent student, in both day " that comma doesn't seem necessary.
"(1869–1904, survived as widow)" I'm confused as to how the marriage ended in 1904 if Hobart died in 1899.
"Reporter Arthur Wallace Dunn wrote of Hobart, "for the first time in my recollection, and the last for that matter, the Vice President was recognized as somebody, as a part of the Administration, and as a part of the body over which he presided".[44]" adding in a year when he said this may be beneficial. Most people woouldn't need it, but I read that and presume it was said a while back, since the past few VPs have jumped to that level.
I'm wondering if the strengthening the office section should be changed to "Assistant President". I'm fine with either or, just tossing it out there.

After looking through a couple sources I have here, you hit on everything I could find, so I have nothing else to really add. I'll put the article on hold and will have no problems passing it once the nitpicks are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:04, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Someone's heard of Hobart! Well done. Yes, the 1904 was a careless cut and paste from my Mark Hanna articles. I'll work thorugh the rest of these. Did you see anything I missed/got wrong/screwed up?--Wehwalt (talk) 19:06, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Got those, thanks.--Wehwalt (talk) 19:19, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. I'll give it another quick look through, though I don't think there are any other issues. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:32, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Only other thing I can think of that might be worth adding is that it seems that Hobart was relatively inexperienced in politics upon entering the vice presidency compared to others (ironic when you think about it). The selection part is detailed enough as is, but I can provide a sentence and source for that if you think it's worth noting. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:44, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'd rather not. He had much more experience, for example, than Chester A. Arthur.--Wehwalt (talk) 20:22, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's true, Arthur definitelydid come out of nowhere. Everything else checks out so I'll pass the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:48, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. It should be at FAC in a month.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:54, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]