Talk:Game of Change/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 03:53, 19 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass
Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

Maybe WL segregationists
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wl Bye (sports)
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background

The first time you mention Ramblers (out of lead) is in the second paragraph. Should probably be mentioned earlier
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would mention On February 18, Loyola was awarded one of eleven at-large bids for the tournament before the February 28 incident
- In progress The Feb 28 incident was less of a singularly-important event, and more like an example of what they were facing all season. But I see how the lack of chronological order is confusing when I only touch on the discrimination aspect so briefly. I think I'm going to split the discrimination bit into its own paragraph and add more details of other incidents. I will try to add that shortly... –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Kind of odd how the Dean W. Colvard sentence is by itself. Please either merge it or expand on it to preferably three-four sentences.
- Done Good point. I've now added two sentences about the large volume of letters Colvard was receiving prior to his decision. –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Why is reference 13 used twice for quotes? It can just be placed at the end of the second quote
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Please see Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch. Don't love the use of In any event.
- Done Changed to Regardless of why, it is clear... –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Game summary

Why is reference 22 used twice for quotes? It can just be placed at the end of the second quote.
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Aftermath

Illinois is already WL above
- Done –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Legacy

Boxscore reference (#27) is not needed since the info is already stated in reference #26
- Not done Reference #27 is not strictly needed, but I wanted to include it because it provides a lot more information about the game, whereas the first reference only describes the game very briefly. –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
How can reference 28 be used to verify a fact for an event that happened after it was published?
- Comment: I've dug up an archive link for that citation if you'd like to see for yourself. Apparently the list of inductees was announced prior to the actual induction ceremony. –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Are two references needed to verify The team was also inducted into the Chicagoland Sports Hall of Fame on September 18, 2013?
- Nope; removed one –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Discussion

Hi HickoryOughtShirt?4; thanks for taking the time to review this! I've made most of the changes you listed, and responded inline where I haven't changed them. Cheers, IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

IagoQnsi Thank you so much, I agree with all of your notes (including why you didn't change some things). Once the in progress incident is fixed I can pass this. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:15, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Okay, I think the Loyola background is good to go now. I've added info about another incident, and restructured the second and third paragraphs a bit so that there's basically one paragraph about racial issues and one about basketball performance. Let me know what you think! Thanks, IagoQnsi (talk) 19:56, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]