Talk:Fruta Fresca/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: DivaKnockouts (talk · contribs) 03:02, 8 October 2013 (UTC)

Introduction

• The first line is a little long and confusing. Make "as the lead single from his studio album El Amor de Mi Tierra in 1999." a separate sentence.
• "Fruta Fresca" became Vives' first number-one hit in the Billboard Hot Latin Songs chart. → "Fruta Fresca" became Vives' first number-one hit on the Billboard Hot Latin Songs chart.
• "It received three Latin Grammy nominations for Record of the Year Song of the Year and Best Tropical Song and a Lo Nuestro nomination for Tropical Song of the Year." — Comma after Record of the Year.
• "In 2003, Brazilian boy band Br'oZ covered the song in Portuguese language under the title "Prometida" for their album Popstars which peaked at number 2 on the Brazilian Airplay Chart." — Add "the" before "Portuguese". Also, make "which peaked at number 2 on the Brazilian Airplay Chart." it's separate sentence, since the way it is now makes it seem that their album actually peaked on the airplay chart.
• Write out the number 2 (all numbers under ten should be written out)

Background, music and lyrics

• Wow, that header looks hideous. Lol, do you think there's a better title?
• Could you maybe add another sentence about the album to make the section a little thicker?
• Then make "It contains twelve tracks, ten of which were composed by Vives including "Fruta Fresca". "Fruta Fresca" fuses the sounds of Latin pop and Colombian vallenato music. In the song, he compares his lover's kisses to fresh fruit "which escaped from your mouth and went up to my head"." a separate paragraph.

Promotion

• "An accompanying music video for the song was released in 1999 which features Vives and the band performing song with various background montages." — What band? This should be expanded to provide information. It's just like right there. Also, add "the", before "song".
• "Vives performed the song live at the 12th Lo Nuestro Awards which Magaly Morales of the Sun-Sentinel noted that his performance "sent everybody up on their feet, swinging their hips"." and "He also performed the song live at the 1st Latin Grammy Awards ceremony where Joan Anderman of the The Boston Globe said that Vives "brought the performances to an upbeat close"." — Remove the word "live". (Both instances)
• Link Pneumonia.

Commercial performance

• "The song debuted in the Billboard Top Latin Songs chart (formerly Hot Latin Tracks) chart at number 21 in the week of November 21, 1999, climbing to the top ten two weeks later." → The song debuted on the Billboard Top Latin Songs chart (formerly Hot Latin Tracks) chart at number 21 for the week of November 21, 1999, climbing to the top ten two weeks later.
• "Desnuda" needs to be linked since you linked "Que Alguien Me Diga".
• "Fruta Fresca" also peaked at number-one in the Tropical Airplay Charts and ended 2000 as the third best performing Latin single of the year in the United States." → "Fruta Fresca" also peaked at number-one on the Tropical Airplay Chart.
• "and ended 2000 as the third best performing Latin single of the year in the United States." — Make this a separate sentence.

Reception and accolades

• "While reviewing songs that were nominated Record of the Year for the first Latin Grammy Awards, an editor for the Los Angeles Times declared that "Vives demonstrated to the world that it was possible, after all, to make commercial music without sacrificing the roots of Latin America". → While reviewing songs that were nominated for Record of the Year at the first Latin Grammy Awards, an editor for the Los Angeles Times declared that "Vives demonstrated to the world that it was possible, after all, to make commercial music without sacrificing the roots of Latin America".
• The song was also nominated "Tropical Song of the Year" at the 13th Lo Nuestro Awards. → The song was also nominated for "Tropical Song of the Year" at the 13th Lo Nuestro Awards.
• "In 2003, Brazilian boy band Br'oZ covered the song in Portuguese language under the title "Prometida" for their album Popstars. — Add "the" before "Portuguese".

References

• FN1 — Link Allmusic, the publisher is Rovi Corporation. No italics to Allmusic, because it is not a printed source.
• FN2 — Link Billboard, link Prometheus Global Media.
• FN9 — Be consistent on whether you link things after their first instance. Compare FN9 and FN10 or FN1 and FN18.
• FN18 — No italics to Allmusic per above.
• FN24 — No italics to Allmusic, the publisher should be Rovi Corporation.

Putting the article  On hold until the above issues have been addressed and/or resolved. — DivaKnockouts 03:02, 8 October 2013 (UTC)

I have fixed all but one issue in the review and that issue is just where you suggested to find more information about the album to expand the background. Erick (talk) 04:40, 12 October 2013 (UTC)

Well, okay. I'm now passing the article. Great job, Erick. — DivaKnockouts 01:22, 15 October 2013 (UTC)

Woohooo! Thanks for the review! Erick (talk) 03:48, 15 October 2013 (UTC)