Talk:Fresh Bones/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 05:02, 16 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Will review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 05:02, 16 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

"After Private Jack McAlpin crashes his car into a tree after two separate hallucinatory incidents, a voodoo symbol drawn on it." Fragmented sentence
"In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private, Jack McAlpin, after several hallucinatory episodes, drives his car into a tree and is apparently killed." Kind of a disjointed sentence. Maybe change to "In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private named Jack McAlpin experiences several hallucinatory episodes and drives his car into a tree; he is apparently killed."
"...but sees blood coming out of his ham" Just wanted to make sure this was written correctly; his ham? Yikes!
"Scully cuts herself on the hand..." -> Scully cuts her hand
Who is Dunham? Who introduce him out of nowhere (I immediately thought of my Dunham (-: )
Wikilink Daniel Benzali in production section
"While he didn't look like a military man, the producers felt he had the quality they were looking for in the role." The first part is subjective (who says he didn't look like a military man?)
"The sequence where a man came out of Scully's hand and strangled her came about by using a mechanical hand which the actor stuffed his gelatine covered fingers through". What male actor? I thought we were talking about Scully (Gillian Anderson)?
What is a sump pump? Is there a relevant wikilink?
10.8 or 10.9 million households?
"The episode was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons" -> "Fresh Bones" was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons
"In their book, X-Treme possibility, authors Keith Topping and Paul Cornell ..." Should X-Treme possibility be italicized? And is possibility meant to not be capitalized?

✗ Not done Ruby 2010/2013 19:08, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"...gave the episode a B- and a more mixed reviewing..." reviewing -> review
The AV Club quote has a " ' issue

On hold for seven days while above comments get addressed. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 03:50, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues!--Gen. Quon (talk) 04:09, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, whoops, sorry, missed that one. Now, I believe they're all fixed. Also, side note: I'd love an X-Files/Fringe cross-over... somehow.--Gen. Quon (talk) 21:15, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Vaguely related, there is a wealth of X-Files/Twin Peaks crossover fan fiction out there. GRAPPLE X 22:08, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There have also been a number of Twin Peaks and X-Files references in various Fringe episodes (but it'd be cool if Mulder and Scully actually stopped by!) Anyways, article looks good. Passing for GA. Nice work, Ruby 2010/2013 04:24, 18 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Well, there was that excellent 30 Days of Night/X-Files graphic novel, so I suppose anything is possible. Thanks for reviewing!--Gen. Quon (talk) 05:00, 18 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]