Talk:Frequent Express/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 03:37, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Some copy tightening and alt text and this is good to go. 7-day hold to Truflip99. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:59, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

• High-capacity transit (HCT) planning for the Portland metropolitan area, last evaluated in the 1982 Light Rail System Plan, was updated with the adoption of Resolution No. 09-4052, the Regional High Capacity Transit System Plan, by the Portland metropolitan area's regional government, Metro, on July 9, 2009. This sentence, as the first non-lead piece, is very laden with definitions that are important. However, it is also incredibly comma-heavy, with three separate appositives. I wonder if this could be reflowed.
  • Done
• continue east until Mt. Hood Community College add a "reaching" after "until"
  • Done
• the mock-up was noted for a design change, which planners attributed to budget restrictions and space constraints What was the change specifically?
  • I removed this as it is no longer relevant (the design was retained in some stations)
• That August, TriMet selected Nova as the manufacturer, and in the following month, placed an initial order for 31 diesel buses with an option to purchase as many as 159 diesel and hybrid electric bus alternatives. Move the comma after "manufacturer" back one word to read ...manufacturer and, in the following month, placed... The appositive—the removable part of the sentence—is "in the following month", not "and in the following month".
• By October, 19 platforms had been poured and seven bioswales and five pedestrian safety islands had been built. You need a comma after "poured". Explainer: User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences
  • Done
• in the outer parts of the route — maybe "along" instead of "in"?
  • Done
• next to each of the bus' three doors — should be "bus's" per MOS:'S
  • Done

Source spot checks

I randomly selected 6 references for spot checks:

• 2: Y TriMet flyer calling the service high-capacity
• 14: Y TriMet FAQ with the quoted statement against bus lanes
• 57: Y Name of the "LYT.transit" product, though I wonder if including its name is a bit overdue, seeing as the company does not even have an article. Consider removing.
• 62: Y SE 76th Ave to SE 148th map, which presumably is paired with the other references for a full route description.
• 66: Y TriMet model of station elements
• 70: Y An official image of the route with names of stations for use in the route table.

Other items

• The tables have captions (MOS:DTAB). Images include a TOO public domain image and various freely licensed images with good captions, but they do need alt text.
  • Done
• Earwig's only complaint is the high-capacity transit definition. As an unfamiliar term, however, and one that may be defined in Portland differently than in other cities, this definition in the footnote is appropriate, and it is properly attributed.
• References are mostly archived; might want to run IABot again for some new additions.
  • Done

@Sammi Brie: Thank you for the review! I believe I have addressed your points. truflip99 (talk) 20:34, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

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