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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Shall review this. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • Wikilink Niagra Falls in the lead

Early life

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  • Is there any information about his parents?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Mid life and career

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  • "Langenheim and his brother William began working in 1840" - I believe the text in bold might be better off placed at the start or the end of the sentence it is part of
  • "Langenheim acquired a daguerreotype camera in 1841 from Von Voigtlander" - the text in bold is better off placed at the end of this text
  • Wikilink photography studio to the relevant article
  • Wikilink Philadelphia Exchange Building to the appropriate article
  • Mention who Louis Jacques Mandé Daguerre to the uninitiated
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The seventh set was given to United States president James Knox Polk.[15] The eighth set was retained by the Langenheim brothers.[10]" - consider merging these two sentences together
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "There were eight phases taken of different time sequences.[27] They are the earliest known eclipse pictures taken in the United States.[28]" - merging both these sentences might help things here
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "1.25 inches high by 1 inch wide (3.2 cm × 2.5 cm)" - would believe the [convert: needs a number] is still better than writing it out in plain
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "2.8125 inches high by 2.3125 inches wide (7.2 cm × 5.9 cm)" - same issue as above
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "(2.8125 inches high" - the opening parentheses isn't needed here
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Later life and death

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  • Added the place where Langenheim died in the sentence mentioning the date of his death
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

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  • "Craig, John S. (1994). Craig's Daguerreian Registry. John S. Craig." - the ISBN number is missing here
  • "Witkin, Lee D. (1979). The photograph collector's guide. New York Graphic Society." - the ISBN looks like it is missing

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 23 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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