Talk:Fraternal fruit-eating bat/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 09:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review this one. First of all, can we get a photograph? There are some free photographs on Inaturalist: [1]. Not all of them are suitable (they should not have the non-commercial restriction). You can filter by licence. This one, for example, is already under CC BY 4.0 and could just be uploaded to Commons: [2]. For the other photos, I think you would have good chances if you ask the authors to adjust the licence for a particular photo so that it can be used in Wikipedia. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 09:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

smallest species in the group of large Artibeus. – What is "the group of large Artibeus"? The "the" implies that this group should be known to the reader, which is not the case. Is it a clade within Artibeus? *Within the genus, it was historically considered to be part of the Jamaican fruit bat complex. However, it is sister to the hairy fruit-eating bat, – I don't understand the "however" here. Do you mean "instead"?

Added the species in the group. Also replaced however with instead.

The species is considered to be representative of a historical connection between bats on the west Andean slope and Middle America. [1] – I think this needs more context, and I can't follow. How can the species be representative for this connection if it is only found in South America?

Added context.

The ventral fur is pale and appears – "ventral" is very technical, can we just say "underside"?

Done.

frosted due to the silvery-gray tips of each hair. – Tips in plural mean that a single hair has multiple tips?

Done.

horseshoe linking to the horse article.

I've removed the link, as there isn't any article on the bat type of horseshoe.

forearm, tibia, metacarpals, and phalanges – these all link to bones, which is not precisely what is meant here?

Clarified.

tragus – link/explain? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 12:10, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done. AryKun (talk) 15:13, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I miss mention of the facial stripe pattern that are listed as diagnostic in your main source. Diagnostic features are very important, since they indicate how to distinguish the species.

Added.

bimodal – can we just say "breeding twice a year"?

Done.

parturition – can we replace this with "egg laying" or similar?

Replaced with "gives birth".

Tumbesian Center – The center of the Department of Tumbes? But why then is it in title case?

It's a place with high levels of endemics, clarified in text.

roosts – link?
on the IUCN Red List due to its large range, commonness, – you didn't have info about commonness in the article, though. Your main source says it is often the most abundant bat, I think this could be mentioned?

The article does state commonness in the Status section. AryKun (talk) 02:59, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That is everything! Let me know if you need any help with the photograph. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:52, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I also added the image. AryKun (talk) 03:13, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Nice! Promoting now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 17:28, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]