Talk:Francis X. Talbot/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:28, 14 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"entering the publishing world" feels a little whimsical, why not just "entering publishing" or is to break up the ..ing ...ing?
- Yes, it was mostly aesthetic. I've rephrased to your recommendation, though. Ergo Sum 21:14, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"of which he became its " just "the" instead of "its" as you have "of which" already.
- Done. Ergo Sum 21:14, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"previewed movies for the National Legion of Decency, and supported Franco's rule in Spain" these seem to be completely unrelated (to my ignorant self) and the sentence does go on a little, so perhaps split after Decency?
- Broke it up. Ergo Sum 21:15, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Philadelphia, Pennsylvania to" comma after Pennsylvania.
- Done. Ergo Sum 21:16, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I don't think "fiction" needs linking. If there was a more specific link, like Catholic fiction then perhaps that would be useful.
- Removed. Ergo Sum 21:16, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1982, he founded" he was dead...
- Accidentally transposed the digits. Ergo Sum 21:19, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Literary career section has eight "also"s perhaps needs a bit of variety in there?
- Changed it up a bit. Ergo Sum 21:20, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would expect to see ex officio in italics.
- Done. Ergo Sum 21:21, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"until 1947. At the same time, during World War II' just reads a little odd, three consecutive timeframes...
- Rearranged the sentences. Ergo Sum 21:22, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"on July 26, 1947 by " comma after 1947.
- Done. Ergo Sum 21:22, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in Annapolis, Maryland from " comma after Maryland.
- Added. Ergo Sum 21:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"of Jesus,. New York:" spare comma here, could be recycled for the comment above...!
- Removed. Ergo Sum 21:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a space between quote marks in the last Writings bullet?
- Yes, it appears the template inserts a space between two quotation marks. Ergo Sum 21:24, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks, as always, for your review. Much appreciated. Ergo Sum 21:25, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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