Talk:Fourth Child/GA1
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Nominator: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 21:12, 28 October 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 18:23, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this as part of our exchange.Tintor2 (talk) 18:23, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
- Lead
- The first sentence is kinda long as it involves three creators without attributing the what exactly what the first three did. How about using Gainax only in the first sentence and then moving to Anno and Higuchi in the second sentence.
- Explain what is the Eva-04
- "Hikari Horaki, class leader of Toji and Shinji's class, asks Toji to prepare something for him to eat." sounds kinda random unless you add some context from the staff.
- Third paragraph is kinda vague. Hikari's case is unknown.
- Plot
- Is the context about Hikari vague? Maybe expanding on that might help the readers understand what was the subject of critcism.
- Development and writing
- Are Higuchi's previous episodes that important for the episode's case?
- Voice acting and soundtrack
- It's kinda a small section. Since these roles are not that relevant I would consider removing it unless it was a crazy case like the old series Ideon where the minor actors were fired apparently as they killed the characters due to budget reasons.
- Cultural references
- Explain what is Space Battleship Yamato
- Reception
- The second paragraph needs an introduction to the subject since it handles.
- I'm not sure if scores help in describing a perception of the review so I'd recommend giving a more elaborated response for the last sentence.
@TeenAngels1234: Good work. I'll pass it once it's all solved.Tintor2 (talk) 19:23, 1 November 2024 (UTC)
- @Tintor2: Hi. Thanks for the review. I think I revised everything, but the first point is still unclear to me. What do you mean? Can you suggest me how to rewrite the first sentences of the lead?--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:59, 3 November 2024 (UTC)
- Just focus first on who created the creator and then provide another sentence to avoid it making it that long. Tintor2 (talk) 13:26, 3 November 2024 (UTC)
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
- Is it well written?
- Tintor2 (talk) 13:27, 3 November 2024 (UTC)
- Just focus first on who created the creator and then provide another sentence to avoid it making it that long. Tintor2 (talk) 13:26, 3 November 2024 (UTC)
