Talk:Forest Glen Park, Maryland/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:30, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

Comment

• "populated place in"' place seems like an odd choice of word here. Location? Area? Region?

• I removed "populated place" and kept unincorporated community. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Why two refs in the lead? Move them into the main body of the article, it always looks weird to ref just tiny aspects of the lead.

• I've moved these references into the main body of the article accordingly. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Forest Glen Park is a scenic, forested suburban community" the first sentence said "Forest Glen Park is an unincorporated community and populated place..." so this reads odd now and is a bit repetitive.

• Thank you for this catch! I've rendered the original sentence as "The community is adjacent to Rock Creek and Rock Creek Regional Park, and to the United States Army's Forest Glen Annex. I also ensured that unincorporated community was repeated below in the main body of the article. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "platted" what does that mean?

• Platted and laid out are essentially the same, so I've removed platted accordingly. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "...intersection in summer 2020" unref.

• I've removed the unreferenced sentence, and will return the sentence once I can find a verifiable reference for it. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "south east" vs "southwest" consistency.

• I've made the directions consistent. Thank you for this catch! -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• (M-NCPPC) if you abbreviate it, use it, don't re-use the full version and re-abbreviate later.

• Thank you! I've removed the second instance of the long-form. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "day National Park Seminary, were" overlinked.

• I've de-linked National Park Seminary. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• " Metropolitan Branch.[9][10][12] The" overlinked.

• I've de-linked Metropolitan Branch. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "who transformed the resort into" resort repeated.

• I removed the second instance of resort. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "During World War II, the" no need to link that.

• I've de-linked World War II. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Annex is currently home " see WP:CURRENTLY.

• I've removed currently. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "The Capital Beltway (I-495) was" overlinked.

• I de-linked Capital Beltway. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "in the 1960s. In 1965" repetitive.

• I removed 1965. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "which is represented by Democrat Andrew Friedson" as of.

• I added as of 2021. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "in Kensington.[28] Albert" overlinked.

• I delinked Kensington. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "border.[36][35]"" order.

• I've re-ordered these citations. -- West Virginian (talk) 13:28, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:43, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Rambling Man, thank you for your thorough and thoughtful review! I will address your comments and suggestions this weekend. Thanks again! — West Virginian (talk) 02:01, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Rambling Man, thank you again for your review, comments, and suggestions. I have finished addressing each one. Please re-review and let me know if there are any outstanding issues that I can address in the meantime. Thank you again for your time and expertise! -- West Virginian (talk) 13:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• No worries, happy to promote, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:02, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Rambling Man, thank you so much as always for your phenomenal review. I look forward to working with you again on another project in the future. Thanks again! -- West Virginian (talk) 23:03, 21 March 2021 (UTC)