Talk:Fore River Railroad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:01, 28 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hiya—I'll get to this tomorrow! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:01, 28 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All done; over to you! This article in particular is fantastic; I had a very few concerns—nice work as always. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 15:33, 29 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work! Pleased now to pass this article for GA status. Congrats! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:54, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio

Earwig says good to go.

Files

All images are of acceptable quality and copyright-free: File:Fore River Railroad locomotive at Braintree Yard, August 2018.JPG is CC-BY-SA and File:GENERAL VIEW OF SHIPYARD - General Dynamics Corporation Shipyard, 97 East Howard Street, Quincy, Norfolk County, MA.tif (never seen .tif before! :0) has a valid public domain rationale.

Prose

In the lead, I would wikilink sewage sludge as you do so for the body.
Good catch, link added. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Do the sources say when the shipyard was built?
MWRA's website says 1900, added. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"In response, Watson decided to build his own railroad, and a route from the shipyard to the South Shore Railroad line was identified." – nit-picky but recommend "In response, Watson decided to build his own railroad, identifying a route that connected the shipyard to the South Shore Railroad line." as IMO and is used quite a few times in the previous paragraph.
Works for me, changed as suggested. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"and electrification added to the north portion of the Fore River Railroad" – recommend "and electrification was added to the north portion of the Fore River Railroad" as the wording coupled with the first and third sentences confused me initially.
Word added as suggested. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"While its primary purpose for existing was gone," – how about "had diminished" instead?
My concern with this change is the shipyard was indeed the sole reason the railroad was built. Other customers that eventually started getting rail service happened later on. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1991 the MWRA" – comma for consistency with the lead and 1,000 carloads sentence.
Comma added. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References

Ref 6 needs an access date.
Access date added, I picked today because I visited the URL to confirm it is live. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Passes spotcheck—refs 1; 3; 6 good to go.

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