Talk:Fordson Island/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:51, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• " the River Rouge. It was" where in the world is this?
  • Y Specified (unintended Michigander chauvinism, perhaps)
• Lead could use a couple more sentences.
  • Y Added.
• "are 42°17′37″N 83°08′52″W[1], and" ref after comma.
  • Y I think it's possible to just add a coordinate template and specify the ref after it -- this shouldn't break anything, so I did it.
• Don't use USGS without explanation. Just put (USGS) after the expanded title in the prose.
  • Y Done. I think I'm going to start doing this before I submit articles for GA now!
• "in 1918[3] by the " move that ref to the end.
  • Y Done.
• "which ore freighters could" do you think we'll get that article ever? Would not "freighters carrying ore" and link freighter be better?
  • Y Changed to lake freighter
• "dredged;[4][3] straightening" ref order.
  • Y Fixed.
• "part of Springwells Township; Springwells became a village, and later the City of Springwells" Springwells Springwells Springwells!
  • Y LOL! I cut it down a bit.
• Is it "City of" of just "city of"?
  • Y It's usually said as "City of", but I don't think this is necessary unless referring to the official name, so fixed.
• "employee would later say" later said.
  • Y Fixed.
• "A small cottage was destroyed " "on the island" perhaps?
  • Y Fixed.
• Are we insinuating that the fire was related to the Prohibition dealings?
  • Y Not intentionally -- now we aren't (I hope).
• "to $580.00 in" you don't need the cents...
  • Y This is some weird crap with the conversion template which I will have to investigate. figured out how to fix.
• Detroit Free Press has an article.
  • Y Linked.
• "in 1979.[12] In 1981" repetitive.
  • Y Fixed.
• "around 1976; by 1981" likewise.
  • Y Fixed fixed.
• "in 1984.[4] In 1987" ditto.
  • Y TRM was to suggest these fixes on September 5, 2021. On September 6, 2021, JPxG would read his suggestions. On September 7, 2021, JPxG would fix the article. TRM would receive a ping on September 7 alerting him to this fact and thanking him for the help in copyediting. JPxG planned, on September 8, to write his next article while keeping TRM's helpful advice in mind.
• "City of Dearborn condemned" overlinked.
  • Y Fixed.
• "by 1987.[4] In 1987" repetitive.
  • Y Fixed.
• Ref 9, 12, 15, 19: SHOUTING.
  • Y FIXED.
• Destub.
  • Y I keep forgetting to do that.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:40, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: There we go. Wise words! jp×g 09:33, 7 September 2021 (UTC)