Talk:Follow Me Home (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 11:39, 10 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

General

One dead link.

Info box

Use the release and length templates.

Lead

It needs to be mentioned that Buena left because it's confusing to read about her writing a verse about her daughter but to see a picture of Berrabah on the artwork.

Composition and theme

Per WP:CITEKILL, "Musically, "Follow Me Home" is a downtempo[6] electropop[5] and R&B ballad.[7]" you a probably best to just put all three citations together at the end of the sentence.

Line-up change and release

I think this section should be put into the Conception and background section, it doesn't work here.
Not done — AARON • ^TALK 14:14, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
What do you mean, it has its own section as it should, concept section is too big anyway Till 14:37, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The line up change should come before the composition. It's a part of the development of the song. And the concept section is tiny. — AARON • ^TALK 16:23, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The sections fine in my opinion. I moved it up though Till 01:50, 14 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't have a problem with the content of the section, just where the section was placed in the article. Either as a sub section of the Background or how you have done it. — AARON • ^TALK 19:47, 14 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

This section is very quote like, it needs to have more flow so put some of them into your own words or reduce the amount of the quote you use and combine it with your own words.

Music video

This could be a two paragraph section to be honest, three is too much.
Put the picture on the right hand side.
The first paragraph has no flow and is full of abrupt stops. It's very jarring to read. Make use of comma's and reword the sentences to make them flow into each other. It reads like a list of facts at the moment.

Credits and personnel

Put this section above the Charts section

References

FN2: Don't WP:SHOUT

Status

On hold for 7 days. — AARON • ^TALK 12:30, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Calvin I fixed the problems Till 14:02, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. — AARON • ^TALK 19:47, 14 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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