Talk:Flushing River/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:01, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead feels a little short for the article...
- Expanded.
"where Vleigh Place traces the Vleigh (old Dutch for Valley) of the headwaters" I don't really understand this?
- It was supposed to mean that "Vleigh" is the old Dutch word for "valley". Fixed now. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"headwaters" is used three times in three consecutive sentences, it's a bit repetitive.
- Fixed.
"Bay.[13][4] " order
- Fixed.
"eastern bank[9][13] " I would just put these at the end of the sentence.
- Done.
"during rains" maybe a USEng thing, rains looks/reads odd to me.
- Yeah, I think that can be chalked up to dialectal differences. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The raw sewage collected in the Flushing River contributed " why is this past tense?
- Fixed - it should be "has contributed". epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"164 Ml" I think "million liters" would be better as not many would recognise Megaliter...
- Fixed.
"The southern branch originated" as you're discussing this in past tense, I would move the "has been infilled" into this first mention, like "The southern branch, which has been infilled, originated..."?
- Done.
"Long Island Expressway" overlinked.
- Fixed.
Interstate 495 in parentheses is overlinked and I would expect this to be after the first instance of Long Island Expressway, not the third.
- Done.
"Looking south " caption is a sentence, needs a period.
- Done.
"waters.[42][4]" order.
- Fixed.
What's a " trunnion"?
- I linked it to Bascule bridge#Types. A fixed trunnion bridge has two leaves that rotates around a large axle that raises the span(s). epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the Flushing River.[52][14] " order.
- Fixed.
bascule bridge is overlinked.
- Fixed.
"Whitestone Expressway (I-678)" I think you should be consistent with this formatting, Interstate 678 (as before) or change Interstate 495 to I-495. I prefer the former as to me, a non-expert, I-678 isn't necessarily something I understand.
- Removed.
"tidal marsh" is overlinked.
- Removed.
"of Flushing Bay.[56][10]" order.
"phragmites" our article is italics.
"Corona Park.[56][10]" order.
"the lakes.[10][4][5][60]" order.
" of Willow plants" no need for capital W.
- Done all.
" the 1964 Fair," since you're not referring to it by its formal title, do you really need to capitalise Fair?
- Fixed.
"is part of the Willow Lake Preserve" the same as the preserve in the previous sentence? Name it first time round?
- Done.
waterfowl is overlinked.
- Removed.
"Flushing Creek.[101][83][102] " order, but are three refs needed for a single sentence?
- I just removed ref 83, and other duplicate refs. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"considered "all but worthless"" according to whom?
- Added attribution.
Several sentences in this para with lots of citations, are they are really needed (see WP:CITEKILL)?
"in The Great Gatsby.[112][83][113]" order, but previous comment applies.
- See above.
Jamaica Yard is overlinked (second time is "Jamaica subway yard")
Roosevelt Avenue is overlinked.
Other overlinks: Long Island Rail Road, Flushing, Flushing River Park, 1964 New York Worlds Fair, Van Wyck Expressway, Willets Point, Kissena Park, Kissena Corridor Park, Kissena Creek.
- Removed them all. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 80 spaced hyphen should be en-dash.
Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles and Source titles.
Ref 87 needs to be pp. for page range, check others.
- Fixed them all. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's my lot for this one. On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 14:52, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks. I think I have tackled all of these. epicgenius (talk) 15:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Happy with the modifications. I removed a couple more overlinks, but now promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]