Talk:Floating Clouds (artwork)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:10, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
Hi, looks like a nice article. Happy to take this on :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:10, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
General checks
- No issues with images,
- No duplinks, dablinks, or problematic external links
- Sources look good and are cited inline, though citations could do a bit better in formatting:
- Don't forget page ranges, see ref 1 for instance
- All caps is not needed in ref 4, you can add the "|trans-title =" parameter (as in ref 6). Please check the other foreign language titles.
- The date format should be consistent throughout the article.
Lead
- In the first line the citation should be placed after the bracket not before, per the MOS
- Maybe a word introducing Calder despite the wikilink (like you have done for Villanueva) would be reader-friendly, they won't have to click a link to get an idea about them
- I am not sure about this; should the country not be mentioned?
- The lead could use a few more sentences to summarize all major aspects of the article. Though within a third of the length of the main text. For example Villanueva is missing in the lead.
- You don't need to add citations in the lead unless the fact is excluded from the main text for some reason
Done - re. citations: the alt name isn't in the body, and the other one is for a direct quotation Kingsif (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
- The lead needs to be elongated to add more aspects of the article.. see WP:MOSLEAD. Villanueva was just an instance.
- Added a paragraph with some stuff from the other sections, besides this I'm not sure that anything really qualifies for the lead - it's not a long article, the specifics don't need mentioning, not many features get such in-depth coverage that a lead mention is warranted. Do you see anything else within the main body you think should be in the lead? Kingsif (talk) 00:18, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
Background
- University City of Caracas should be wikilinked, it's the first mention in the main text. Please check for any other instances
- Villanueva hired many artists from around the world to contribute works to the campus, including Calder As it is his first mention in the main text, introduce him like you introduce Villanueva
- Done Kingsif (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
Design and construction
- Convert templates typically go from US to metric, here it is the other way round. Use the "order=flip" parameter in convert templates.
- Thirty-one clouds create the artwork, with 22 on the ceiling, 5 on the right side wall and 4 on the left side wall Generally numbers less than ten should be in words, and above should be in digits
- Done - though I don't know if "disp=flip" has affected the templates? Kingsif (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
- Looks good, but you missed the area template which needs a swap too. Not sure about the tons, you can check the convert template options. By the way should we use decimals instead of fractions? And should it not be 13 "millimetres"? Consider using "|abbr=on".
- Done - the area one was already in metric, that was the issue! Kingsif (talk) 00:18, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
Appearance and function
- Any wikilink or details about Modern Art in Latin America? I guess it should be in italics if it is a book
- Done Kingsif (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
I guess that's it. An interesting read, and close to meet the GA criteria. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:34, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review (especially on Christmas, wow)! Everything above covered, is there anything more? Kingsif (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2019 (UTC)
- Happy new year in advance :) Issues to which I've not replied are resolved. The lead is what needs some work. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:02, 26 December 2019 (UTC)
- Happy New Year to you, too. Responded again :) Kingsif (talk) 00:18, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
- Great! I believe this article meets the GA criteria now. Happy to pass :) Sainsf (talk · contribs) 21:07, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
- Happy New Year to you, too. Responded again :) Kingsif (talk) 00:18, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
- Happy new year in advance :) Issues to which I've not replied are resolved. The lead is what needs some work. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:02, 26 December 2019 (UTC)