Talk:Flaws and All/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 17:53, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Infobox

Is missing some detailed information (release date, is there an image?, and it should not just read "song")

It was not released as a single. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Why isn't the album "B'Day Deluxe Edition" linked?

Done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"while Beyoncé Knowles and Taylor produced the R&B record" - what record?

Err, the song Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"received positive attention from critics" - why is attention here? Maybe something like this "received (mixed to) positive reviews from critics".

Don't get it but done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"Beyoncé Knowles and Taylor also produced the R&B song" needs rewording, what about It was also produced by Knowles and Taylor

Don't get it but done Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"the song was additionally included on compilation albums" which ones? and source?

Read on... Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"compilation album" - delink, don't need two of them linked in the same section.

Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"In 2008, Knowles released the song on a compilation album dedicated to karaoke performances titled Beyoncé Karaoke Hits, Vol. I." is this even necessary? I never had seen this being stated on any song article.

Of course it's not necessary, but I don't see why it not be included. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

""Flaws and All" garnered positive reviews from critics, most of which complimented the ballad for being original and favored its addition to the B'Day re-release" - source?

Removed. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"BET included the song "Flaws and All" as one of the "Top 10 Feel Good R&B Songs", ranked at number nine" needs re-wording, probably should remove "Flaws and All". You have stated the song multiple times.

So what? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

"The video for the song was shot on " - remove "for the song"

Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

"including the song as part of her set list" - remove "the song" and rewording to something like this Knowles performed the song on multiple occasions, including on her tour The Beyoncé Experience (2007).

Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"The performance also caught the attention of The New York Times" delink The New York Times, its already linked in this same section.

Removed first ocassion as it was irrelevant. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

""Flaws and All" was not included on the tour's live album, I Am... World Tour" - why not? If not notable, then remove sentence.

Does there need to be a reason? Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:40, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Final notes

I still see that this article needs a lot of work. Please address the concerns that I had stated. I had wrote down these notes as I read the article. I am going to ✗ Fail this nomination. Once you have completed the issues, try giving the article a peer review. This can help for your next try at good article status. Thank you, AJona1992 (talk) 18:15, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]