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Reviewer: — Legolas (talk2me) 04:25, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
Be prepared. — Legolas (talk2me) 04:25, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
- recorded by American R&B singer Beyoncé Knowles for her second studio album re-released, B'Day Deluxe Edition --> recorded by American R&B singer Beyoncé Knowles for the re-release of her second studio album, B'Day Deluxe Edition.
Done - wikilink B'day
- "Flaws and All" is similar to earlier records by Knowles, most of which compared it to that of Dangerously in Love --> doesnt make sense
- wikilink classic and ballad
- in which he sees through all of her flaws and loves her unconditionally --> who sees through all of her flaws and loves her unconditionally
- Knowles for the B'Day Anthology Video Album ---> Knowles for the B'Day Anthology Video Album Done
- italicize other instances of "B'Day", this is poor work.
- the LEAD doesnot summarize the article.
- Knowles discussed the concept for the video --> Knowles explained that the concept for the video Done
- please stop using apostrophed words like "doesn't" etc. -Not a problem here....? Theuhohreo (talk) 14:21, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
- sees songwriting duties by --> songwriting duties? -Nothing wrong with that. Theuhohreo (talk) 14:21, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
- Taylor.Knowles and Taylor --> space Done
- Although the song was originally released during the re-release deluxe edition of B'Day, the song was included on many other releases. --> huh? Done-Try re-reading, cause that was fine. Theuhohreo (talk) 14:21, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
- "Flaws and All" garnered very positive reviews by critics, most of which complemented the ballad as a highlight of the album --> WP:OR, you cant generalize likie this Done
- 'Flaws and All,' --> wrong, it should be 'Flaws and All', Done
OK enough, this article is just bad, bad, atrociously written. Please get a good copy-editor and then re-submit. Failing this. — Legolas (talk2me) 04:58, 13 March 2011 (UTC)