Talk:Flame retardant cotton

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I apologize for the copyright violation - I am a very new editor and my intention was to paraphrase. Any feedback or assistance is more than welcome! VanillaPumpkin (talk) 19:17, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

@VanillaPumpkin: Great article so far! I think you have a really good start, but it definitely needs more detail. If you feel like you've hit writer's block, maybe add some pictures or diagrams into your article to beef it up a little. I don't really know how notable the article is, but it would be cool if you could get some feedback from other Wikipedians on that. Let me know when you have more content and I'd be happy to provide my opinion. Other than adding more content, the article has correct grammar and spelling -- Good job, Hannah! Pippalenderking (talk) 23:37, 11 November 2021 (UTC)

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 7 September 2021 and 17 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): VanillaPumpkin. Peer reviewers: Ortiz.da.

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Some General Feedback/Copyedit Proposals

• "treated in such a way that it prevents or slows ignition by different treatments applied during the manufacturing process"

— This wording in this part of the sentence is a bit difficult to follow.

• "incorporating flame retardants into their matrices"

— Maybe could add a wikilink for "matrices", but I'm not sure which one to use from here [[1]]

• Would be great to get a picture if possible!

• Would it be possible to add a section on the history of flame retardant cotton? Such as who invented it, what it was first used for, early versions of it, and improvements that have been made over time?

-Ortiz.da (talk) 03:05, 12 November 2021 (UTC)