Talk:Five Nights at Freddy's (video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: Editoneer (talk · contribs) 14:15, 29 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Greetings. Editoneer (talk) 14:15, 29 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written

We need words that would be understood by any reader. pastiche it's not a common word.

Changed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 03:01, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure that Golden Freddy is an actual character that can be active at night as they're an easter egg. For example Phantom Chica (FNaF 3) does something similar to Golden Freddy but she's not an easter egg.

I removed Golden Freddy from the animatronics “inhabiting the facility”, but do you think he’s still worth a mention somewhere in the page? If so, where? GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 03:01, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I added a line on Golden Freddy later on in the gameplay section, what do you think? GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 13:39, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

What about the 1-9-8-7 code from the custom night? Editoneer (talk) 14:54, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I mean, the game has many easter eggs, is it necessary to mention every one? GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:18, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This type of easter egg probable has something regarding golden freddy or that bite of '87, is it important or not? And I didn't said to mention every easter egg out there. Editoneer (talk) 13:08, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Is there somewhere specified why they're using electric doors instead of mechanical doors with a lock system? And also why is that guy recording only at night where those animatronics can get him?

Neither of these questions are answered in the games or by Cawthon himself. It’s probably to make gameplay more exciting. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 03:01, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

There's an unnecessary space between internationally and [45].

Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 03:01, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiability

[17], [18], [19], [20], I suggest instead of referencing at which level it occurs, it's better if you write mot-a-mot what it says on that pink slip and more details like this like you did with the phone call references. Or probable another article documenting these?

[17] is a reference for animatronics making a garbling noise, and I’m not sure how I’m meant to quote this. Also, writing what the pink slip says mot-a-mot doesn’t seem appropriate in my opinion. For example, for night 5, this would be “DATE: 11-12-XX PAY TO THE ORDER OF: Mike Schmidt $120.00 One Hundred twenty dollars MEMO: Valued employee Fazbear Entertainment”. It just doesn’t seem right to quote it in this way. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 03:01, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

As I think most methods, yeah... I feel is right to the game itself. Editoneer (talk) 07:37, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I don’t understand what you mean by this, can you clarify? GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:15, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry I don't think it wrote completely. I feel is right to cite the game itself. Editoneer (talk) 13:08, 2 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I played this game before I'm going to require a second opinion, but meanwhile I want you to fix the errors above. Editoneer (talk) 11:03, 30 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Well that went rather fast, time for a second opinion. Editoneer (talk) 07:37, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from second opinion

I'll add some of my comments below:

"(reminiscent of restaurants such as Chuck E. Cheese's and ShowBiz Pizza Place)" I'm not sure this is needed.
- Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"after hours" when you say this I presume you mean "at night", but you've already mentioned that it's a night security guard so this is redundant. I suggest it is changed from takes the role of a night security guard who must defend themselves from the restaurant's animatronic characters that become mobile and homicidal after hours. to takes the role of a security guard who must defend themselves from the restaurant's animatronic characters that become mobile and homicidal at night.
- Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
You mention in the lede that it gained a cult following, but I see no mention of this in the body of the article (unless I'm not seeing things right).
- Added. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"resulting in a game over", I would suggest changing this to "resulting in the game ending".
- Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not sure of the need to mention easter eggs from the game as these aren't too relevant but that's just my opinion.
- I think Golden Freddy is worth a mention because it is the most well known and he is sometimes considered the "fifth animatronic" of the game, but other than that I agree. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"(hence the game's title)" not sure there's a need for this.
- Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"If he survives the seventh "customizable" night with all the animatronics set to "20" in difficulty," not sure there's a need for the speech marks here for customizable and 20.
- Fixed. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In the "Legacy" section, you might want to be more specific. Try and give examples of adaptations of the game and give the title of the film if possible. The example Five Nights at Freddy's: The Silver Eyes springs to mind.
- Added. The film doesn't have a title yet as far as I know. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Try and include more photos and media if they are available.
- Added a photo. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll also just comment on the sources. The article for Joystiq says the site is a blog which questions the reliability of this reference as blogs aren't generally considered reliable. I'm also looking at this website, from which you took this reference. It's quite hard to judge the reliability of some of these sources as the sites look user-generated, but may still have an editorial side. I'd generally say be cautious and stick to more of the mainstream sites.

I've removed both of the sources you've mentioned. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all my comments. I hope you can understand what I am trying to say. Kind regards, Willbb234^Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 08:57, 20 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Willbb234: I've tried to address your concerns but let me know if I missed something. GenericWikiUser1 (talk) 09:26, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@GenericWikiUser1: thanks for this and nice work. I'll ping the original reviewer, Editoneer, to see if they have any more comments and let them pass the article, however, they haven't edited for three weeks so I'll leave it a couple of days then pass the article myself. If I forget (I'll try my best not to!), please let me know. Kind regards, Willbb234^Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 17:58, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Because I haven't edited in a while that doesn't mean I'm not looking at Wikipedia, well if you think it's ready then I can pass it, so what do you guys think? Editoneer (talk) 19:15, 21 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Editoneer, that should be fine, thanks. Willbb234^Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 17:44, 22 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]