Talk:First Flight (Star Trek: Enterprise)/GA1
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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 11:55, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
- It occurs to me that the concept of "warp" isn't well understood outside of Star Trek. I know there's a link to a warp article, but I tend to think making people click elsewhere for something that integral to the plot might distract them. Do you think a line or two about warp here would be helpful?
- Added an additional paragraph to production, which included a quick line about the Vulcans too. Miyagawa (talk) 23:52, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
- Similarly, "dark matter" might need some explaining.
- I've added a line about dark matter, although the key quote from the NASA page is that scientists know more about what dark matter isn't than what it actually is. (And I know even less!) Miyagawa (talk) 00:00, 22 March 2013 (UTC)
- Graph 2 of the plot takes place in the past, but it isn't clear from the wording, so some clarity might help.
- Added a "flashback" note. Miyagawa (talk) 23:01, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
- "The Vulcans attempt to use this to argue that ... " here, it might help to clarify what role the Vulcans have in the series here (the average person who hasn't seen early ENT episodes might not understand)
- Any information about how long shooting lasted or when it ended?
- Added. Miyagawa (talk) 23:04, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
- You should link the ranks of the real-life Navy people.
- Done. Miyagawa (talk) 22:58, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
- Two images appear to be properly licensed. I see no apparent problems with article stability or neutrality.
- No dup links or dab links. External links all appear to check out.
- Placing the article on hold to await responses. —Ed!(talk) 12:22, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
Great work! Passing the GA. —Ed!(talk) 02:14, 25 March 2013 (UTC)