Talk:Final Fantasy Tactics: The War of the Lions/GA2
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:36, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
I'll finish this tomorrow. JAGUAR 21:36, 10 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "originally for the Sony PlayStation Portable" - get rid of Sony, really no need for it here
- originally for the Sony PlayStation Portable" - also, write this out as PlayStation Portable (PSP), for clarity
- "for the PlayStation video game console" - also get rid of "video game console" as the reader will know what they're in for. Also, PlayStation needs to be linked to PlayStation (console) (the first one)
- "This also includes new playable characters from other Final Fantasy titles" - should be The War of the Lions also includes or something like that
- "Ramza's soldiers can each equip a Job" - should 'job' be capitalised?
- "they are lost for good" - try they are lost permanently
- "Following the trend of Final Fantasy video games on PlayStation systems" - link PlayStation (console)
- "Because of the PlayStation Portable's screen size" - de-link this, as it's already linked
- "according to Famitsu magazine" - lose 'magazine'
- No dead links
- Ref 61 is missing an access date
- No dab links
Looking good. Once all are clarified then this should pass. 
JAGUAR 11:39, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
- With all of the issues addressed, this is good to go!
JAGUAR 19:40, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
