Talk:Final Fantasy Crystal Chronicles: My Life as a King/GA1

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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 18:26, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, starting the review. --Pres N 18:26, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I've done general grammar fixes where I felt it would be faster to do them than to explain them here.

Gameplay

"Each "day" lasts approximately 10 minutes (depending on kingdom morale)" - explain what "kingdom morale" is, as well as what the purpose of "days" are- just visual, or is there a gameplay effect?

Plot

That's... all the plot there is? I almost think that the plot section should get turned into the first paragraph of the gameplay section, if it's just an intro piece.

Development

"Several gameplay ideas were considered for the project, including making it an action role-playing game or a sandbox video game, but the developers were not fans of the genre" - but you mentioned two genres, did they not like ARPGs either?
"At first it was thought that players would spend most of their time observing the action, but eventually features were added to keep the player constantly doing some action" - repetition of "action"
"removed for not cohering with the finished game" - cohering is kind of an odd word to use
The bit about the bakery feels weird as the final sentence of the section

Reception

You mention scores for a couple reviews, but not most of them- any reason?

References

2: Wired, not Wired (magazine)
7: Is it possible to get the original source (SE NA members page), or is it lost to the mists?
Multiple: It seems like IGN is the only online source that you cite with a seperate publisher (IGN Entertainment), why?
16/20/22: You have 1UP.com italicized as a "work", but not Gamepro- shouldn't it be the other way around?
Multiple: while you generally cite authors as first last, there's a few that you do last, first- try to stick with one or the other.

Images

Both fine, though the FUR on the gameplay image is a bit sparse

Thanks for the through review! I will get on it now. Judgesurreal777 (talk) 22:00, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ok that should be everything! Added publishers, standardized authors, clarified gameplay, reorganized development, moved plot, bolstered image rationale, and moved review scores. I also found even more development in the process. Judgesurreal777 (talk) 02:27, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passed! --Pres N 04:07, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]