Talk:Final Fantasy All the Bravest/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Abryn (talk · contribs) 22:37, 6 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Gameplay

Final Fantasy missing italics
leaderboard appears to be more commonly used than leader board
Inconsistent use of player vs. players

Development

Android version mentioned in lead and infobox, but neither it nor its release date are mentioned elsewhere

Reception

Paragraph's quite long, consider finding a way to split it for improved readability. The best thing you can do to help this is to reduce the use of quotation and better summarize what they say. In doing so, the section feels smoother and less repetitive.

References

US Gamer should be USgamer, much like Eurogamer (sister orgs)
All instance of either GamesRadar should be changed to 'GamesRadar+'
Droid Gamers is an unreliable source, please replace

Images

The screenshot doesn't feel like it properly communicate anything that cannot be conveyed solely through text. Consider replacing with a combat screenshot or not having any gameplay screenshot.
No text explaining replacability or respect for commercial licenses in rationale

@Judgesurreal777: Just in case. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 23:38, 6 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

OK @Abryn:. I believe I have done what you wanted. I did some rewriting and splitting of the reception section, and added a new screenshot. Let me know if I missed anything. Now the only thing left to do is I am looking to see if there were any Japanese reviews or development. Then I think it’ll be ready! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 00:55, 7 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry about the late reply, asthma made it hard to respond. As far as the Reception goes, I still think it does too much quoting. It would be best if you summarized a lot more. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 17:45, 7 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Also truth is I wanted to work on this article eventually, its badness was fascinating, haha. At least someone improved it. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 18:18, 7 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Feel better! I found a Japanese review, so that helps, I added some new development info before I launched the GA. I’ll take another crack at the reception section soon. Judgesurreal777 (talk) 19:01, 7 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, rewrite two! Only one quote, a little lengthy but only one. @Abryn: Judgesurreal777 (talk) 01:53, 8 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, asthma got worse. Will finish review tomorrow. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 03:08, 8 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Take you’re time! We have a big drive ahead of us! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 18:59, 9 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, looks good now. There was also an error in quotation marks but I fixed that, along with summarizing more. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 19:28, 10 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the reviews! I hope to repay the favor someday when I get less busy! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 19:41, 10 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Congrats all. Glad it went smoothly. Sergecross73 msg me 23:09, 10 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks @Sergecross73: for making it so complete! That helped it to where it is today :) Judgesurreal777 (talk) 23:42, 10 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]