Talk:Fembot (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 08:14, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, let's start :D Don't worry, the article's perfect, just some minor stuff. Novice7 (talk) 07:32, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The song was released as one out of three promotional singles before the album's release. – remove the "out"
"Fembot" is an electro song with an R&B vibe and electronic rhythm. It features Robyn rapping several double entendres in the verses, while proclaiming that "Fembots have feelings too" in the chorus. – question. Electro songs would have an electronic rhythm, right? I don't know, please correct me if I'm wrong. Also, try merging these two sentences together to give a better flow.
"Fembot" was met with positive reviews from critics, who highlighted its humor and lyrical content – did all reviewers praise its humor and lyrics?
including the Röyksopp collaboration "The Girl and the Robot" – include year after song.
Year after the tours too.

Background

In an interview with music magazine Pitchfork – um, did you mean "webzine"?
she argues against the notion that humans and robots are separate – can you find a better word than "argues"? Also, she did not say this, the interviewer asked if she argued and she said yes. Maybe, you can re-write this as "...when asked if she disliked the notion that against the notion that humans and robots are separate, Robyn responded by saying..." (this is just a suggestion. I'm sure you'll find a much better wording)
The link to I, Robot, is it needed? You can take a look at WP:MOSQUOTE.
It was later released onto digital retailers in the United States on 13 April 2010 – released "to" digital ...
It was one out of three promotional singles released before the release of Body Talk Pt. 1 – again, remove the "out" :)

Composition

Year after single's name.
About.com's reliability is being questioned constantly at FAs. Be careful that you don't rely too much on it.

Reception

Fairall also wrote that ..., Fairall, however, wrote that ... repetitive.
Ben Norman of About.com proclaimed the song has his favorite track on Body Talk Pt. 1 the word proclaimed is a bit too big, isn't it? What about "selected"? Also, a typo (the song "has" his)
The link you've provided does not say that too. Please rewrite and add the correct source.
The song went on to spend seven weeks on the chart – make it simple. The song spent ...
In Norway, "Fembot" debuted at number nineteen on the VG-lista chart. The following week, it reached its peak of number ten. oops, you've not provided the debut week.

Live performances

and said; "With just a keyboardist ... said → commented/noted

References

The date format is dmy. So, you'd have to convert the dates of the all the references to make the article's dates consistent.
{{Robyn}} is not needed. {{Robyn singles}} is enough.

Media

Properly sourced, has fair use rationale.

Good work. On hold for seven days. Novice7 (talk) 07:32, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I believe everything is fixed now! Including the references :) I just wish the Dancehall Queen review would go this smoothly. Pancake (talk) 09:37, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Great. Just one more thing. Can you add the debut week for Norway? Because in the next sentence we mention "The following week...", the readers might want to know the debut week :) Those ref fixing must have been tiring :D Novice7 (talk) 09:47, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oh! Unfortunately VG-lista only publishes the week, and not the date. Should I write "week 16 of 2010" or something? Pancake (talk) 10:08, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, I see. In that case, we should merge the two sentences :) Novice7 (talk) 10:18, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done:) Pancake (talk) 10:23, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]