Talk:Federalist No. 28

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 13:29, 9 February 2023 (UTC)

• Over to you! As always, please ping me when done. Thanks, ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 14:05, 9 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Levinson made it tricky by not actually using the word "revolution". who would certainly include, both for Publius and for generations of Americans afterward, the brave “patriots” who violently resisted British rule. All other suggested changes have been made. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 15:02, 9 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Fair enough. Nice work on the changes and thank you for the hasty response—I am now happy to pass yet another fantastic article of yours for GA status. Congrats! ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 15:38, 9 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

Files

The image used is relevant, good quality and copyright-free:

File:Alexander Hamilton A17950.jpg: valid public domain rationale.

Prose

• The name of the essay uses curly quotations whilst your other Federalist Papers articles use the straight quotations. Is this correct?
• I would wikilink the federal gov't (to Federal government of the United States) and state govs to state governments of the United States as they seem relevant due to being discussed frequently and it would be important for readers to know the difference.
• I may be dumb but I cannot seem to grasp what "He argues that a military is an inevitable aspect of "civil society", comparing it favorably to the instability of "petty republics"" is saying here?
• "Hamilton then proposes a separate scenario of several separate confederacies of states" – is there an alternative word choice available to avoid saying separate twice so close together?
• "rendering military repression of the people to be highly unlikely." – I do not think to be is necessary here.
• The sentence starting "Anti-federalists feared the" reads a bit long to me.
• "Hamilton does maintain that the" – recommend "Hamilton maintains that the" for better flow IMO.
• "citizens have final authority" – recommend "citizens have the final authority". Disregard if this is standard in American English though!
• "Hamilton also proposes that the state governments would provide another advantage in such an event, as they would provide" – is it possible to avoid saying would provide twice here?
• The sentence starting "Federalist No. 28 has been invoked in Supreme Court" reads a bit jaded to me. Perhaps it could be split?

Refs

Spotcheck—no concerns with refs 1, 2, 4, 9 or 10, or b–e of ref 5, but:

• I could not seem to find any mention of the American Revolutionary War in ref 5 a.

Other

External links, infobox, navs, other templates and cats good.

• Move the short description to the tippity-top of the article.

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