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Review: September 17, 2016. (Reviewed version).

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:00, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:00, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

indie rock band → genre is not needed
(2011). It was issued in the United States on July 26, 2011 as a digital download by Nettwerk. → (2011), with it being made available for digital download on July 26, 2011 through Nettwerk in the United States.
The single was written → The recording was written
received a mixed → remove "a"
Appreciated for its "catchiness" → While being appreciated for being catchy
a different reviewer was critical for the song containing → a different reviewer criticized the song for containing
A music video → An accompanying music video
and features → featuring

Background and composition

with the news that a song → with news concerning a song
by Ivy → by the members of Ivy
assistance from → assistance being credited to
Described → Being described
pop" that → pop" vibe that
Keyboards accompany the song's melody → The recording incorporates keyboards in its instrumentation
chorus; PopMatters's → make two sentences here.

Critical reception

came alongside a mixed → was met with mixed
and stated → stating that
Bergstrom from PopMatters → PopMatters's Bergstrom (word rep.)
He continued by questioning → The reviewer continued questioning

Since we know the sex of the reviewer in question, I think this may sound a bit too much for an encyclopedia. Carbrera (talk) 17:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

chorus' → refrain's

Music video

A music video → An accompanying music video
2011, via → Remove comma
The video was directed → The visual was directed (word rep.)
helped create → helped creating
the trio → the band
camera, as → remove comma
for the visual's entirety → for the rest of the clip
and ends → with it ending
individual using the keyboard → using the keyboard individually

This doesn't really make sense to me. Carbrera (talk) 17:08, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

vibe", through → remove comma

Track listings and formats

Remove "and formats" from the title.

Credits and personnel

Credits and personnel adapted from All Hours liner notes and Ivy's AllMusic discography → Credits adapted from the liner notes of All Hours and Ivy's discography on AllMusic

Release history

Unlink label

Outcome

On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Finished with everything. Thanks so much! Carbrera (talk) 17:08, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Passing Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:31, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]