Talk:Fake Love (BTS song)/GA1

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

---

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: LOVI33 (talk · contribs) 18:17, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

Hey Ashleyyoursmile! Thanks for your amazing "Kiss and Make Up" review. I will review this in return. LOVI33 18:17, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good, the cover arts just need alt text.
• I would advise against using unnecessary brackets: "is a song recorded in two languages (Korean and Japanese) by South Korean boy band BTS" → "is a song by South Korean boy band BTS, recorded in both Korean and Japanese."

• This wording has been used in a number of GAs that I wrote earlier such as Mic Drop (song), DNA (BTS song) and Blood Sweat and Tears (song); I prefer to keep it this way if that works for you.

• "The Korean version was released on May 18, 2018, as the lead single from the band's third studio album Love Yourself: Tear (2018) by Big Hit Entertainment." → "The Korean version was released through Big Hit Entertainment on May 18, 2018, as the lead single from the band's third studio album Love Yourself: Tear (2018)."
• "in that country" → "in the country"
• "A "Rocking Vibe" remix of the track was released" → "A remix, titled "Rocking Vibe", was released"
• "Two music videos for the single were directed by YongSeok Choi, one for the original version and one for the remix" → "Music videos for both the remix and original version were released; both were directed by YongSeok Choi."

• "Both" would be repeated twice in that case and is reading awkward. I changed one for the original version and one for the remix to one for the original version and another for the remix, if that helps.

• "The debut of" – does this mean the song's debut performance? If so, specify this.

 Done Everything else

Background and release

• "On June 12," → "On June 12 of that year,"
• "serviced "Fake Love" to" → "serviced the song to"
• "song-writing" → "songwriting"

 Done all

Music and lyrics

• [9][23][24][25][26][27]: too many refs at the end of the sentence, split them up.
• Target ambient to Ambient music
• Target synth to Synthesizer
• "and synthesizer" → "and synthesizers", removing the target

 Done all

Critical reception

• Looks Good! Great job excluding repetition from the section, it can be hard sometimes.

• Thank you! :)

Commercial performance

• "also performed identically on the component Download Chart" Specify that it just peaked at number 1 on the chart. The way it is written right now make is seem like it also debuted at number 6 and peaked at 1.
• "The single remained in the top five for five" → "The single remained in the top five of the digital chart for five" for specifications
• "their first top-ten on the chart" → "their first top-ten entry on the chart"

 Done all

Music videos

• "(01:00 PST)" Usually for these, UTC is used as it is a universal time. I would recommend changing it to UTC.
• Great writing for the synopsis!

 Done

Live performances

• Image needs alt text

 Done

Track listing

• Looks good, I would just add total lengths for listings with more than one track.

 Done

Credits and personnel

• Per WP:OVERLINK, remove targets on BTS, "Hitman" Bang, RM, KM-Markit, and Jungkook

 Done

Charts

• Looks good!

Certifications

• Looks good!

Release history

• "Country" → "Region"

 Done

See also

• Looks good!

Notes

• Looks good!

References

• Copyvio score looks good at 36.7%
• Ref 26: change work/website to just Rolling Stone and cite India as location
• Ref 32: Target Sound on Sound on itself for work/website
• Remove or replace ref 39 per WP:ALBUMAVOID
• Ref 47: Cite Idolator as work/website: Wikipedia_talk:Manual_of_Style/Text_formatting/Archive_4#Should_website_names_be_italicized?
• Remove or replace ref 52 per WP:ALBUMAVOID
• Ref 54: Cite author-link2 to Laura Snapes
• Ref 55: Cite author-link to Jon Caramanica
• Ref 129: Cite Celebmix as work/website
• Ref 135: Remove target to YouTube on via per WP:OVERLINK
• Ref 155 is a permanent dead link, try converting it to a {{single chart}} template

• I am not being able to fix this with single chart template, can you help with this?

Hey Ashleyyoursmile, my apologies I accidentally thought it was for the France chart. Since you actually have the France chart, having its download is redundant so you should probably remove it.

• LOVI33, I removed it. Let me know what you think of the other changes. --Ashleyyoursmile! 16:28, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

 Done everything else

External links

• Looks good!

Final comments and verdict

• Ashleyyoursmile, another amazingly well written article.  On hold, Just a few fixes and this will be ready for GA! LOVI33 01:47, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

• LOVI33, thank you so much for reviewing this. I have mostly addressed all concerns, except a few where I've left comments. Please let me know what you think. --Ashleyyoursmile! 12:19, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

• Ashleyyoursmile, eveything looks good, accept the second album cover still needs alt text. When that is added I will pass this. LOVI33 16:38, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

• User:LOVI33, I made some small edits. For instance, I see now that I agree with your first comment about the lead, and while User:Ashleyyoursmile prefers it differently, I disagree. In general the article is too full of detail and wikilinks, and a few grammatical errors were found among the verbosity. It needs another good read. BTW, can you adjust the colors in your signature? I can barely read your name. Thank you, Drmies (talk) 16:50, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

• Drmies thanks for your copyedit. I will be sure to do that. I have added the alt text myself so Ashleyyoursmile, thats a ✓ Pass. LOVI33 17:18, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.