Talk:FK Željezničar Sarajevo/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 01:50, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah I will be reviewing this article. HawkAussie (talk) 01:50, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Lead

The club has also finished as runners-up once in the league, - Drop the word, has in that sentence
...having won 6 Bosnian championships, 6 Bosnian Cups and 3 Bosnian Supercups. - Manual of style states that any number below ten have to be written out.
The club's so far best post-war European result... - Drop "so far" in that sentence
...result was qualifying to the 2002–03 Champions League third qualifying round, - Change this part of the sentence to state only the third qualifying round from 2002-03 or something else to make sense
...to Newcastle United 0–5 on aggregate. - Change it around to be 5-0 on aggregate, not 0-5
...in which both teams have similar win-loss records and games ending in ties. - This oart of the sentence can easily be dropped.
The club has produced many famous Yugoslav and Bosnian players... - This bit is fine but the list of players is way too many for that section.

Pre-independence (1921–1992)

First paragraph, no references at all
... a friendly, was played at Kovačići, - Kovačići is meant to be linked.
...17 September 1921 against SAŠK Napredak which resulted in 1–5 defeat. - 5–1 defeat not 1–5 as you have posted.
The next day another game was played, a 1–2 loss vs Sarajevski ŠK. - This needs rewording here, something like "The following day, Zeljeznicar played another game against Sarajevski SK resulting a 2-1 defeat."
No mention of anything between 1921 and 1941 like did they compete in a league or anything like that.
Many footballers were members of the resistance troops, and some of them were killed. - This sentence isn't really needed here.
Again that third paragraph needs references here.

Planinić Affair

Why is this section of the article it's own thing, it could easilly be merged into the first section.

UEFA Cup 1971–72 quarter-finalists

Once again, this bit seems out of place especially when you put it towards the previous two sections.
Also no references for this section either, ahhh

1971–72 Yugoslav champions

It was mentioned in the first GA review, but why is their a league table in the history section where it could be placed anywhere else.
Željezničar's greatest domestic success at the time... - Why is domestic linked here as that is the wrong place to have a link. Also no references again.

1980–81 Marshal Tito Cup finalists

...season, Željezničar reached the Yugoslav cup final - Capital C for Cup.
...but lost 2–3 to another Bosnian side Velež Mostar with both Mehmed Baždarević... - Again, the winning score first. Also drop the word "another" here as that word isn't needed.

Comments

Look I am not even going to finish this as it's doesn't seem to be close to being an Good Article especially when their is sections of the article not even referenced which fails WP:OR. If I was you, I would put it through WP:COPYEDIT or WP:PEERREVIEW at the minimum to help out with this article. HawkAussie (talk) 10:21, 17 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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