Talk:Ezri Dax/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:20, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I wanted to make my 100th GA review special, so I decided to set upon one of my favourite DS9 characters. I should have this up within a day, but I might become inactive after Boxing Day, even so I'll complete this review. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:20, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

The lead is slightly too lengthy for an article this size - but it does summarise the article well, so I couldn't suggest anything to cut down. It's up to you if you feel like it needs shortening
Should 'last appearance' be in the infobox?

There isn't actually the option to include it - it was discussed at the project a while back but the consensus was not to add it because it brought up issues around canon/non-canon works. Miyagawa (talk) 22:43, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Ezri Tigan was born in 2354 on the planet Trill, a member of the indigenous species" - makes it sound like the planet itself was a member

I switched the sentence around to fix that issue. Miyagawa (talk) 22:43, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Because of her new state, Ezri's romantic relationship with Finok ended" - who is Finok? Even I can't remember who this is

Never appeared on screen - I changed it to "former boyfriend". Miyagawa (talk) 22:43, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"However, Damar (Casey Biggs), the leader of the Cardassians" - Cardassian Union or the rebels?

At the time he was still leader of the Union, so added that. Miyagawa (talk) 22:43, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References

All the references are in working order, except one external link but I tried it and it's fine
All the citations are in the correct places, so this too meets the GA criteria. No problems here
"At the time, de Boer was busy working in Canada but an unknown in the United States" - doesn't make sense, was she unknown as an actress in the US?

That's right, I've changed it to say that. Miyagawa (talk) 22:43, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

On hold

This is a well written article, it is comprehensive, well referenced and I even learned some things I did not know about her character. I couldn't find many, but the only things I could find wrong with it were what I mentioned above, if all of those could be addressed quickly then this article should have no problem passing the GAN. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days despite something telling me it won't need that! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:53, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, I think I've covered everything. Miyagawa (talk) 22:44, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Close - promoted

Thanks for addressing them so quickly, this article now definitely meets the GA criteria. I also made a mistake in putting one of the comments under the 'references' section, but it doesn't matter. Anyway, well done on another Trek GA! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 23:28, 23 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]