Talk:Exportadora de Sal S.A./GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:53, 27 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:17, 19 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Some of the copy errors are issues I can see from a native Spanish speaker. Hablo español; si tienes dudas no dudes en contactarme. It just needs some copy tweaks and will then be ready. Also suggest adding alt text while you're here to make the images accessible for the visually impaired. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:50, 19 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

The lead sentence should mention this is in Mexico. Done (AI)
Comma after Ludwig Done (AI)
Link appropriate items in the lead as you do in the body. Done (AI)

History

$63 millions USD In English, this is rendered as "$63 million" (no use of plural "millions" in this context, as adjectives are not pluralized) Consider US$63 million Done (AI)
Consider using {{convert}} to present imperial measurements alongside metric generally in this article. -> Did it in a couple of instances, but didn't know how to deal with "metric tons" (AI)
The project became the largest salt works facility in the world, and included the construction of a deep-water port Remove the comma. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences Done (AI)
From 1976 ESSA is jointly owned by the Mexican government (51%) and Mitsubishi (49%) Is there more about the Mexican government acquiring a majority stake? Sounds like something Echeverría or López Portillo would insist on... ->Yes, Echeverría! Added mention to him and new sources. Done (AI)
The company has exclusive rights to sell the salt This fact does not fit well in the flow of the sentence -> Rewritten (AI)
and as 2015 should be as of 2015 Done (AI)

Corruption controversies

$27.2 million dollars "dollars" here is redundant, but it should be "US$" to specify which dollars. Done (AI)

Environmental impact

Comma after "exposed these plans" Done (AI)
Mexico's President consider "Mexican president" or even just "President". Done (AI)
"California Gray Whale" is not a proper noun: "California gray whale" will suffice. (We don't need to print quotes identically for grammar: MOS:CONFORM) Done (AI)
Quotation mark before period as a quote of a sentence fragment. MOS:INOROUT Done (AI)

Source spot checks

Of the 26 references, five were chosen at random for spot checks.

10 — Supports claim
12 — Supports claim
15 — Supports claim. It looks like these are subject matter experts in the field. The site also supports a book they wrote.
16 — Supports claim
23 — Contains the CorpWatch quote that is attributed.

Other items

There are two images: an infobox logo with valid NFUR and a validly licensed CC-BY-SA 4.0 image. Consider adding alt text for both.
The only Earwig issue is the CorpWatch quote, which is justified as a representation of their opinion.
References are archived.

Response from GA submitter

Hi Sammi Brie, I've started working on the feedback you kindly provided. Thank you very much for taking on this GA review. Muchas gracias! Alan Islas (talk) 07:12, 21 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Alan Islas, I've gone ahead and added the alt text, but I'd still like to see the other "Consider" items rectified, including the use of conversions for units and fixing that "exclusive rights" flow issue. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:36, 24 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie, apologies for the delay, this week I have been very busy with work. I've re-written the paragraph with the flow issues, hopefully that helped. Also addressed the convert comment, with the exception of metric tons, which I was unsure on how to handle. Thanks again! Alan Islas (talk) 19:14, 25 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I did the metric tons one, @Alan Islas. One last item: is there a source for the sentence starting The company diked the shallow tidal flats around Ojo de Liebre lagoon...? Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:23, 25 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Added the source for that sentence and rewrote a bit to avoid too close paraphrasing. Thanks! --Alan Islas (talk) 02:41, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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