Talk:Everything Will Be Alright in the End

original art http://chr15t0ph3l35.deviantart.com/art/Mountain-Monster-144163976 not mentioned if weezer was able to contact the artist for permission — Preceding unsigned comment added by 213.230.30.42 (talk) 13:25, 15 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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Yo user:NoD'ohnuts. You've reverted me twice now.

My version:

Everything Will Be Alright in the End departs from the electronic pop production of Weezer's previous two albums, Raditude and Hurley, returning to an alternative rock sound. The lyrics deal with singer Rivers Cuomo's relationship with his father figures, women and fans."

Yours:

Musically, Everything Will Be Alright in the End marks a departure from Weezer's previous two albums, Raditude and Hurley, which featured a more electronic pop production. The album, in comparison, featured a more alternative rock sound, similar to the band's original sound. Lyrically, the album deals with band leader Rivers Cuomo's relationship with his father figures, women and fans.

My take on some of the redundancies in your version marked in bold:

Musically, this is an article about a music album - of course it's talking about music. redundant. Everything Will Be Alright in the End marks a departure "marks a departure from" is a wordier way of saying "departs from". You use "marks" again in your next paragraph: why? from Weezer's previous two albums, Raditude and Hurley, which featured a more electronic pop production. The album, in comparison, featured a more alternative rock sound, similar to the band's original sound. We can simply combine these sentences

What necessary information does your version add? Popcornduff (talk) 16:53, 9 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

To put it another way: if we used my version, would the reader's understanding of the subject be inhibited? For example, if we delete the word "Musically," will the reader wonder what we're talking about in the next sentence? I contend that the answer is no and we should therefore, in accordance with the rules of good writing, delete it, as it adds nothing. Popcornduff (talk) 17:02, 9 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry to drive the point, but this article User:Tony1/Redundancy_exercises:_removing_fluff_from_your_writing might help demonstrate the rules I'm trying to apply here. Popcornduff (talk) 21:53, 9 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Orphaned references in Everything Will Be Alright in the End

I check pages listed in Category:Pages with incorrect ref formatting to try to fix reference errors. One of the things I do is look for content for orphaned references in wikilinked articles. I have found content for some of Everything Will Be Alright in the End's orphans, the problem is that I found more than one version. I can't determine which (if any) is correct for this article, so I am asking for a sentient editor to look it over and copy the correct ref content into this article.

Reference named "MusicTimes":

From Lonely Girl (Weezer song): "REVIEW: Weezer's "Lonely Girl" Recalls the 'Green Album' Era with a Plea to Dance [LISTEN]". Music Times. Retrieved October 16, 2014.
From The British Are Coming (song): "Weezer Declare 'The British Are Coming' In Guitar-Filled New Song from 'Everything Will Be Alright in the End' [LISTEN]". Music Times. Retrieved October 16, 2014.

I apologize if any of the above are effectively identical; I am just a simple computer program, so I can't determine whether minor differences are significant or not. AnomieBOT ⚡ 03:36, 15 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]