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Reviewer: Aranea Mortem (talk • contribs • count) 17:31, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
Hey there igordebraga, this has been up for a while so I've decided to give it a review.
- "It aired on October 25, 2006, making it the 53rd episode of the series" How does when it aired make it the number of the episode? I think this was fourth episode of third seas, making it 53rd and then the airdate was added later, change it to "is the fourth episode of the third season of Lost, making it the 53rd episode of the series. It aired on October 25, 2006 and was written by Edward Kitsis and Adam Horowitz and directed by Stephen Williams."
- "James "Sawyer" Ford" Could this be just Sawyer throughout the article?
- "considering the episode full of thrills and new mysteries." if you're quoting, you should put quote marks around the words, but you also need to attribute, who is it that is saying this? I can't find it below.
- The lede needs to be expanded from the content below it. Make it two beefy paragraphs.
- The image caption: "Ben uses a rabbit to demonstrate what was done with Sawyer" needs a tweak "Ben uses a rabbit to demonstrate what he has done to Sawyer".
- "hypodermic needle into his chest" inserted into his...
- "as again Desmond" as, again, Desmond
- Unlink future.
- Season 2 should be season two per MoS.
- What was the outcome of Emerson and Holloway's submission for Emmys?
- Shorten the plotsum, it's 700+ words where the plotsum max for films is 400-700 (and this is an episode, less screentime). Try to get it down to 600 words.
Aranea Mortem (talk to me) 17:31, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
Done them all (the plot in particular is now 676 words). Good to see you're back! igordebraga ≠ 02:09, 11 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks, and good work, I'll pass this now, do we careful however to pay attention to WP:OVERLINK, links are good, but they have to be in the right places. Good hearing from you again... Aranea Mortem (talk to me) 02:15, 11 September 2011 (UTC)