Talk:Everett, Washington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jasper Deng (talk · contribs) 08:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

I will be making my complete review later; the first thing I noticed is, you should qualify "seventh-largest" by population, as by area, it appears to rank 9th. I suggest "seventh-most populous".--Jasper Deng (talk) 08:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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A few issues to address before it can be passed

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   In addition to the above:

   • "American settlement" – "American" is not restricted to non-native settlers. Use a different term.
     • Fixed.
   • "Everett became the county seat in 1897 after a dispute with Snohomish contested over several elections and a Supreme Court case." – I understand this is the lead, but this seems unnecessarily vague to me. "dispute" in particular could use an adjective.
     • I don't think an adjective is needed, given the explanation given in the second half of the sentence.
   • "Puget Sound was further explored and charted ny the Hudson's Bay Company" – typo, "ny" should be "by"
     • Fixed.
   • "The railroad did not terminate in Everett as originally hoped, instead continuing along the shoreline of Puget Sound to Seattle." – hoped by whom?
     • Added.
   • "After outside investors withdrew in the Everett Land Company" – "in the" should be "from the"
     • Added "shares", as the investment was initiated by the investors, not vice versa.
   • "Everett itself suffered from a major fire on August 2, 1909, that destroyed 12 buildings, including the county courthouse." – the second-to-last comma is not needed.
     • Fixed.
   • "The Port of Everett was created on July 13, 1918, to enable public ownership of the waterfront and promote economic development in the city" – similarly, the last comma is not needed.
     • Per MOS:DATECOMMA, it is needed.
   • "The works program also built a new county airport, Paine Field, southwest of Everett that opened in 1936 to serve commercial uses" – "southwest of Everett" is awkward here; I suggest moving it before the first comma.
     • Moved behind instead.
   • "The population boom triggered construction of new housing areas around the peninsula and new schools, with enrollment in the Everett School District doubling to 11,600 from 1941 to 1951" – did it double exactly? More often than not it didn't start out with 5,800 students, so give the original number.
     • The source gives the 1941 figure as 5,990 and the 1951 figure as 11,628. A slight difference, but quite minor in restrospect. Added the rounded figures and dropped the doubling.
   • "Electronics manufacturer Fluke Corporation (now part of Fortive)" – "now" seems rather redundant here. Consider removing the entire parenthetical remark.
     • The change is quite recent and most sources have not been updated to reflect the new name, so I believe it's warranted.
   • "The city government does not plan to enforce the dress code ordinance until the lawsuit is resolved with the lifting of the preliminary injunction." – a little confusing in the context of the previous sentence; if the 9th Circuit ruled in favor of the city, what happened to the injunction?
     • Still pending. The appeal to the Supreme Court has not been processed yet, and the last newspaper articles are from February 2020.
   • The farmers' market should be capitalized as "Everett Farmers Market" seems to be the official name of the entity.
     • Done, but I'd also like to keep the link.
   • "an ameatur team" – typo; consider rewording as "are an amateur team... set to begin their... in the 2020... league" to remove the commas for better flow.
     • Reworded the sentence.
   • "The Port of Everett also has a large public marina and its own boat launch at 10th Street that also serves a ferry to Jetty Island." – This is rather awkward with two uses of "also". In particular, it isn't clear what the second "also" conveys here.
     • Dropped the first "also"; the second is meant to tie the ferry to the 10th Street boat launch.
   • "A public swimming pool was opened at Forest Park in 1975 and replaced by a permanent structure in 1984" – so the first facility was temporary? Consider clarifying that.
     • Fixed.
   • "The park is situated along Pigeon Creek, with recreational facilities on a plateau overlooking the ravine and several miles of hiking trails." – a plateau is usually considered to be a much larger landform (many square miles). Maybe use "hilltop"?
     • Fixed.
   • "Its bus rapid transit system, Swift has" – missing comma
     • Fixed.

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

   • "The city's growth was not stopped by the fire and a new county courthouse opened in 1910 alongside the Everett High School campus" – "stopped" is not very academic in this context, maybe "hindered"?
     • Fixed.
   • The 1916 massacre's content should be perhaps cut down and given its own section with {{main|1916 Everett massacre}}.
     • Cut and merged into a single paragraph, but given that it was a defining event in the city's history and has a buildup that needs explanation, I think the current size is fine.
   • "which pre-dated Everett" – MOS:HYPHEN: one word usually.
     • Fixed.
   • List of neighborhood associations: Consider making into prose per MOS:USEPROSE.
     • I believe it fulfills WP:LISTPURP, in that it is a natural index that would be less coherent in prose. A similar example at Arlington, Washington did not draw complaints at FAC, and other examples for cities exist.
   • Similarly, consider the need for the table listing the teams of Everett; this seems redundant to the prose.
     • Tables for sports teams are fairly standard across city articles, especially to add championships. I have expanded it further by including former teams.
2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

   C. It contains no original research:

   Most would seem to consider the climate of the whole region to be oceanic, and the given climate data only supports a "dry summer" for one month. Consider prioritizing the description of the climate as oceanic.

   Moved it up, but I am unsure what to do with the remaining Koppen sentence.

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

   It took me an hour or so to read through the article; this is about as much content as I think is appropriate without becoming overwhelming.

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

   It may soon need updating due to the pandemic's effect on employment.

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   Perhaps use more images, particularly for sections that don't have any. It's understandable if no such images exist.

   Will work on taking more photos once my camera is back in good condition (and likely during the post-pandemic recovery).

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   On hold while the remaining issues, primarily pertaining to writing, are ironed out.--Jasper Deng (talk) 04:07, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

   @Jasper Deng: Thanks for the review. I have made changes as suggested, but also left comments where I feel there is a better option. SounderBruce 09:38, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

More things:

• "which relinquished their lands to the territorial government and established the nearby Tulalip Indian Reservation, where they would be relocated." – should be "who", as these are all groups of persons.
  • Made the treaty into the subject.
• "It is located primarily on Port Gardner Peninsula" – the Port Gardner Peninsula
  • Fixed.
• "The city has a high rate of opioid abuse, particularly OxyContin and heroin, fueled by cross-state drug trafficking."

Otherwise, it's probably ready.--Jasper Deng (talk) 00:08, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

• • Added two stats from a 2017 report. SounderBruce 00:45, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
    • I think it is good to go now; I declare the article a GA.--Jasper Deng (talk) 07:41, 5 May 2020 (UTC)