Talk:Evangelos Zappas/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:16, 31 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will begin soon. JAGUAR 21:16, 31 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The second and third paragraphs of the lead should be merged to improve prose flow
- Done Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"The legacy of Evangelis Zappas, as well as the legacy of his cousin Konstantinos Zappas, was also used to fund the Olympic Games of 1896" - past tense was
- Hmm, I can't seem to see what's wrong. What do you recommend this be changed to? Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Consider moving some of the lead's citations into the body, per WP:LEADCITE
- The cited statements in the lead seem to be general statements that the body of the article goes into detail on. Absent access to the sources, I'm not sure I can move them down at this time. Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The first three subsections of the Biography section are very short, can they be merged?
- Done Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
" which is named in his honour and that of his cousin Konstantinos Zappas" - is this article using American or British spelling?
- I would like to say British English, as I can't find an example in the article where an American spelling is used, but I could very well be overlooking it. Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Merge the last two sentences together in the Philanthropy section
- I've removed the next to last sentence per my comment below. The remaining sentence seems distinct enough from the paragraph above that it could probably stand on its own. Mz7 (talk) 00:01, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
No dead refs
Dab links OK

Quite solid! On hold for 7 days. JAGUAR 21:21, 31 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Just to note, the GA nominator, Theban Halberd (talk · contribs), is currently blocked indefinitely from editing. Since your notes seem pretty straightforward, I might take a stab at them this weekend. Mz7 (talk) 01:12, 5 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

One sentence in the "Philanthropy" section reads: In Romania are known the funds provided for the establishment of the Romanian Academy and the Romanian capital Bucharest rebuilding, which was severly damaged by a major fire in 1847. The grammar threw me at first, but it seems to mean that Zappas is known in Romania for providing funds for the establishment of the Romanian Academy and the rebuilding of Bucharest. The text was added by an anonymous user on 23 August 2016 with an edit summary pointing to this Romanian source that I can't read. It appears the user inserted the sentence between the existing citation to the Ruches book, which makes me suspicious that the Ruches book doesn't actually verify the sentence. For that reason, I am inclined to remove the sentence. It's possible that the Romanian source from the edit summary does verify the sentence, but it's best to leave it out until that can be definitively verified. Mz7 (talk) 02:04, 5 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I must have completely forgot about this! Thank you for getting back to this review in the blocked user's absence. I see that all of the outstanding issues have been addressed, so I see no reason to keep this on holdany longer. I've looked through your edits and this article seems to meet the GA criteria now.

JAGUAR 18:37, 24 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]