Talk:Euphoria (Usher song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 14:25, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
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[edit]- Lead
- "After their joined performance" Should that be "joint"?
- Background
- "In 2009 interview with People Magazine" >> "In a 2009..."
- " the album was commercial success" >> or yu say "it was a commercial success" or you say "it was commercially successful"
- "for his next album he is working on a" >> "he was working"
- I have to say the certain stuff here has to be cut. Also, i recommend a little rewrite to make each sentence more cohesive with each other.
- Can you point me what specifically? — Tomíca(T2ME) 19:29, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
- Well, as this is a song from Looking for Myself, I consider that most stuff related to Raymond vs. Raymond should be removed, as it may not be relevant enough or relatable enough to the song. — ΛΧΣ21™ 17:24, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
- What do you think about it now? — Tomíca(T2ME) 17:30, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
- Production
- On the quote: "We met Usher couple of years ago", either write "a couple of years ago" or add [sic]
- "than to rather work with just big name." a missing quote mark here.
- "Mark "Exit" Goodchild recorded the song Silent Sound Studios" >> "at Silent Studios"
- Please verify the whole article to spot some of these issues. I've seen a lot of this kind.
- Copy-edited. — Tomíca(T2ME) 19:29, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
- "Swedish House Mafia together with disc jokey Alesso also co-produced one more song from Looking 4 Myself entitled "Numb"." I find something is not quite well with this sentence. Let me see what it is.
— ΛΧΣ21™ 17:35, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
Okay. I've checked the rest of the article and it is very good. Passing. — ΛΧΣ21™ 20:57, 7 October 2012 (UTC)