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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:51, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Looks interesting :) Happy to take this. Cheers, Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 16:51, 6 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • No copyvio, dablink, duplink, external link issues
  • Sourcing and citations: Decent, just a few things,
  • Avoid all caps unless it is an abbreviation
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:30, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Refs 6 and 18 are the same. Also, why is the page no. in italics everywhere?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:30, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • In "ADP, Alpha delta pi" it should be Alpha Delta Pi. And probably just the "last" parameter (as in the last and first names) looks good and the whole name can be put just into it, we don't need the "first" parameter.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:30, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • No proper author names for the Marquis and Banta refs?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:30, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Prose and coverage
  • Not sure the ages of the parents are relevant enough, though their backgrounds and occupations surely would be, like Fitzgerald's father was a prominent physician and owner of two plantations with several slaves in the next section.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:34, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fitzgerald was first married to Judge Arthur E. Cochran... I think her "mid-life" should rightly start here. The previous details ideally belong in Early life.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:37, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • A couple of short sentences in places can be combined with each other or longer ones. Like One had a radical outlook and caused problems among the household servants. She was dismissed from her duties and In 1862 she married Dr. Edmund Fitzgerald. He was a widower with a daughter, Caroline ("Carrie")
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:45, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • There seems to be an error here. There Carrie married Captain A. F. Lucas, a successful civil engineer in the oil industry. Fitzgerald lived there with her stepdaughter and new husband for many years So Carrie married the civil engineer, while the line in the lead says She (Eugenia) was married three times, one husband was a judge, another a doctor, and the third a civil engineer.
 Done - fixed lead. Fitzgerald was married only twice. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:04, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Would be good to add the year in Fitzgerald became one of the founders of the first woman's secret society established in a girls' college
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:30, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Octavia An drew Andrew?
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:33, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The heading says "Societies" but we are really talking about just one with several branches here
 Done - changed to "Secret society" --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:39, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • There should be a few details of the impact of this society (as discussed in the 2nd para of Societies) in the lead. And I am not sure how relevant marriage details would be, as it is we could include other personal life details of similar importance as well.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That should be it. Beautiful article :) Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 02:16, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: - All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:49, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, the changes look great. All issues fixed, ready for promotion now :) Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 12:10, 11 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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